User talk:Anantvis/sandbox

Peer review

Hello, I read your changes and additions to this page and I think that you wrote it well. I made the following suggestions based on personal understanding. I hope it helps you.

Some contents of the pages lacks references. I think it is necessary to add references to some of the facts raised/stated in the article. Eg: The direct quotation in the 2nd paragraph.
Also, it may be better to not rely the entire graph on one single citation.
Some words like "harassment" may have strong personal sentimental tendencies.
With respect to the 1st bullet, I saw the original section "Environmental regulations" and I'm not sure whether you made any change in the unbolded paragraphs. A little bit mark at the place you've changed would help a lot. Thanks
Looks like the second reference seems to link back to the page itself

Delikitty (talk) 22:17, 13 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I also looked at this article and thought it was well written, very unbiased and professional. I agree with the previous points made by the other fellow editor.

Make sure to add references, and hopefully not all from one source
Look at the use of capitals, not consistent throughout article especially when referring to policies
I was confused a bit with transitions from sentence to sentence. Each point seemed pretty different albeit related. I'm not sure how to improve that but maybe focus on words to fuse ideas.

I know that last point is a little vague but just look at how it flows and how it could be improved. Mdrogotzke (talk) 03:09, 16 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Thank you class mates for the valuable insights, i just want to clarify that only the bolded section at the last represent the additions to the pre existing article section . The content before the bold section is just the pre-existing article and hence the citations have been removed by me while working on the sandbox ,but they exist well with references in the actual wiki article I will definitely try to get more sources to add some information under the Environmental Regulations section Thanks