User talk:Amy Lainez/sandbox
Jenna Heer: Lead Section The lead section reads very well and gives a good description of the rest of your article. The only thing to potentially add is if there is any controversy regarding his studies. The tone is also very good. Table of Contents The table of contents should be after the lead section. The headings shouldn't be subheadings of the main article. Sections and Subsections the sections are written very well and give good information on your topic. The tone is very neutral and it flows very well. Try to add more information on his early life and expand on what you already have written in that section. There is not any vague statements and everything is cited very well. Tone The tone is neutral, article sounds encyclopedic, there is no slang that should be eliminated
Rhea Quezon: All of the material is well-written, detailed, and (seemingly) credible. Your lead section did a great job of explaining why we should care about this topic. I was most impressed with your "career" section because it was extremely in depth. The "books" sections did contain some typos that should be reviewed such as the double periods after "long-term gain" or the inserted slashes in "bugs". If anything could be added to the page, a "personal life" section would be nice since most of the information provided is on his works.
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