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The content is excellent, clear and concise within each section. The introduction may be organized differently, beginning with physical description of the nematode, and then a smaller mention of environmental impacts. The language of the information is appropriate for wikipedia.

There are a couple grammatical and spelling errors present: The presence of a lesion on the plant root is not enough to determine that an infestation of Pratylenchus thornei is occurring... Nematodes, part of the genus Pratylenchus, are among the... Pratylenchus thornei is a species of the root-lesion nematode, they are called the root lesion nematode because of the lesion they leave on the roots of the plants they infest; they feed on the healthy tissue of plant roots. --> Pratylenchus thornei is a species of the root-lesion nematode. They are called the root lesion nematode because of the lesion they leave on the roots where they feed on healthy tissue of plant roots.

References are well constructed and appropriate. Article will need proper citing, but that will be taken care of upon transfer. Author has indicated.

PEER REVIEW BY AKASH CHANDRA

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The content of the essay is analyzed very well and concise, for the first part you discuss the class of nematodes and give the morphology as well as the description of them, and you start to talk about the cost of what the U.S. needs to spend and how they cause issues to crops which is good because you are tieing in information of how these pests cause a wide array of issues. The part where you talk about how the nematodes feed and what they feed on should maybe be included in another section. The language that you use and the flow is very easy to understand. A section about where these nematodes are found in a section called habitat can be added in. The behavior and reproduction section are very detailed and informative you talk about how their reproductive structures work and how mating occurs. A few more sections maybe need to be added on to the essay regarding its conservation status, life span of these nematodes, and their range. Akashevolution (talk) 23:06, 15 November 2016 (UTC).[reply]

RESPONSE TO PEER REVIEW: These nematodes are found all around the World, which is why I did not include a section on their habitat. They can infect a wide range of plants and thus endure a wide range of temperatures, soil types and other environmental factors that might inhibit other organisms from spreading. I was going to include the life span of the nematodes in the section about their reproduction. I have a few sources that talk about the conservation of the nematode, and i will add that to my final article. Aedding1 (talk) 22:26, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Peer Review

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Overall I believe that your draft is well developed and well organized. To the first section I would not only state the genus, I would also include the Kingdom and the phylum that it is associated with. The part where you start to talk about the behavior and reproduction of the nematodes you do not give that much description. You might want to add more on their behavior and how long it takes the eggs to develop into a nematode. Also you talk about how during their life cycle they go through two phases, try and add more information about these two phases as you just mentioned them and not really give a description. Also your citations you might want to use the button they provide in Wikipedia instead of writing the number in parenthesis. Overall the draft is well developed, good job! Jmarroquin12 (talk) 00:53, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

RESPONSE TO PEER REVIEW: I will add the domain, kingdom, and,phylum of the nematode in my final article. I will provide the proper citation in my final article, I just need to review how to do that on wiki. At the time I wrote this it was hard to find articles that went into detail about the life cycle the nematodes go through, especially since it seemed that there were only little differences between the adult and juvenile nematodes.Aedding1 (talk) 22:26, 29 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Feedback

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Anastasia, your article addition here is very thorough, clear, and well-referenced. I agree with some others than the overall organization would be a bit more clear if you added more subsections to this article. Your "Behavior and Reproduction" section could perhaps just be called "Behavior" (see Wikipedia Species Articles handout). However, your last section could perhaps be separated into more than one section - perhaps "Distribution and Habitat," and some of this information could go under "Behavior". Your lead section is also a bit long - could some of this information go under "Anatomy and Morphology" or "Taxonomy"? Also, do you plan to add a Table of Contents at the top of the article that lists all sub-sections?

It looks like some of your reviewers added comments directly into your article - do look at them and then remove them. Also, strive for shorter paragraphs in your overall work. Focus on communicating the key points clearly but concisely. What is the main thing you want your readers to get out of each article? Last, are there any key words in your draft that you could link to other Wikipedia articles? Rhirshorn (talk) 19:29, 21 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]