User talk:AJF1403/Antonio de Espejo
Peer Review
[edit]Article looks good, rich with citations and balanced information drawn from your sources. ErichAns (talk) 15:53, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
Feed back from Dr. Hyde
[edit]You’ve made a good start here. I can see where the new section will fit and the sources that you have begun to add.
1) Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite.
I’m not sure what you want to add here – just what documents were left by this explorer/slaver? Or what other members of the group said about him? Or is the bigger point to lay out how much effect Espejo had on the region?
2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)
What you have here are some classic works that are already in the article. You need to find more recent scholarship about the slave trade in what becomes New Mexico and the Pueblo region. Yake a look at: James Brooks, Captives and Cousins – Slavery, Kinship, and Community in the Southwest Borderlands. 2002, University of North Carolina Press. And also Ramon Gutierrez, When Jesus Came, the Corn Mothers Went Away : Marriage, Sexuality, and Power in New Mexico, 1500-1846; Carroll L. Riley Rio Del Norte : People of the Upper Rio Grande from Earliest times to the Pueblo Revolt. Salt Lake City: U of Utah, 1995. Web. (All ONLINE at OU) I found one older piece that is specifically about Espejo: You’ve made a good start here. I can see where the new section will fit and the sources that you have begun to add.
1) Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite. I’m not sure what you want to add here – just what documents were left by this explorer/slaver? Or what other members of the group said about him? Or is the bigger point to lay out how much effect Espejo had on the region. 2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites) What you have here are some classic works that are already in the article. You need to find more recent scholarship about the slave trade in what becomes New Mexico and the Pueblo region. Yake a look at: James Brooks, Captives and Cousins – Slavery, Kinship, and Community in the Southwest Borderlands. 2002, University of North Carolina Press. And also Ramon Gutierrez, When Jesus Came, the Corn Mothers Went Away : Marriage, Sexuality, and Power in New Mexico, 1500-1846; Carroll L. Riley Rio Del Norte : People of the Upper Rio Grande from Earliest times to the Pueblo Revolt. Salt Lake City: U of Utah, 1995. Web. (All ONLINE at OU) I found one good piece that is just about Espejo: Greenleaf, R. (1971). Antonio de Espejo and the Mexican Inquisition 1571-1586. The Americas, 27(3), 271-292. doi:10.2307/980249.
3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add A little thin!
4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles. I think you need more links to various tribal nations, slaving expeditions, and Spanish governors.
5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean-up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while. GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 69/80