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Fresh water: (Fresh water)
Our group chose this article because fresh water is a broad and general topic. There are many detailed information that can be added to this article.

Lead

Lead evaluation

The Lead includes a concise introduction of fresh water in first three sentences. It also includes a description of the major sections. However, the lead compares fresh water with seawater, brackish water, mineral-rich water, and potable water, which may confuse the reader. In my opinion, the comparison can be placed as a section in content rather then in the lead.

Content

Content evaluation

Most of the content are related to fresh water, but some sections are underdeveloped compared to the section of Aquatic organisms.

In "Water distribution" section, the article only provides that most of the world's fresh water is frozen in ice sheets. It has not mentioned where are these glaciers distributed.

In "Human uses" section, the author only gives information about argriculture, but there are more major human uses of water that can be concluded, including industry and domestic uses.

In "Water pollution" sections, the author mainly talks about oil spills. I think this part can be seperated in to water pollution casued by human and naturally appeared water pollution caued by natural disaster.

Tone and Balance

Tone and balance evaluation

This article is generally neutral and unbiased. But I think "Human uses" and "Water pollution" sections are underrepresented. Especially for water pollution part, the author only mentions oil spills as a major souce of pollution.

Sources and References

Sources and references evaluation

In this article, most facts are backed up by a reliable secondary source of information. However, not all sources are up-to-date. For example, the information derived from USDA about Irrigation & Water Use are based on a research in 2012.

Here are the list of sources I plan to use when edit this article:

Water Pollution: Effects, Prevention, and Climatic Impact. By Inyinbor Adejumoke A., Adebesin Babatunde O., Oluyori Abimbola P., Adelani-Akande Tabitha A., Dada Adewumi O. and Oreofe Toyin A. Submitted: April 4th 2017Reviewed: October 27th 2017Published: March 21st 2018. DOI: 10.5772/intechopen.72018. https://www.intechopen.com/books/water-challenges-of-an-urbanizing-world/water-pollution-effects-prevention-and-climatic-impact
Domestic Water Use. https://www.usgs.gov/special-topic/water-science-school/science/domestic-water-use?qt-science_center_objects=0#qt-science_center_objects
Environmental exposures due to natural disasters. Anthony H. Knap, Director* and Ivan Rusyn. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC4913349/
Setu, N & Hossain, Shahadat & Saha, Rupayan & Rahman, Md.Atiqur. (2014). NATURAL DISASTERS IMPACT ON THE WATER CYCLE, RESOURCES, QUALITY AND HUMAN HEALTH. https://www.researchgate.net/publication/261028122_NATURAL_DISASTERS_IMPACT_ON_THE_WATER_CYCLE_RESOURCES_QUALITY_AND_HUMAN_HEALTH
Hannah Ritchie and Max Roser (2020) - "Water Use and Stress". Published online at OurWorldInData.org. Retrieved from: 'https://ourworldindata.org/water-use-stress' [Online Resource]. https://ourworldindata.org/water-use-stress

Organization

Organization evaluation

This article follows a logical order. It is concise but some sentences are hard to read. For example, "Locally, however, if more fresh water is consumed through human activities than is naturally restored, this may result in reduced fresh water availability from surface and underground sources and can cause serious damage to surrounding and associated environments". Sentence like this can be separated in two sentences.

Images and Media

Images and media evaluation

This article includes images that help reader understand. It also provides some charts to illustrate examples of human uses of water. But the information in the chart are derived from data in 2012, which should be updated.

Overall impressions

Overall evaluation

Strengths: The lead is easy to understand. The whole article is really concise.

Drawbacks: The facts in this article are unbalanced. Many section only provides vague information. Many sources in this article are outdated.