User:Vazi97/Myelin basic protein/ExasperatedOctopus Peer Review
Peer review
[edit]This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.
General info
[edit]- Vazi97
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Lead
[edit]Lead evaluation
[edit]Since you didn't touch the lead, I don't have much to say here. I'm sure it's fine, the one that is there is pretty extensive. You could maybe add a sentence about the structure in the lead, to make sure people know the information is there.
Content
[edit]Content evaluation
[edit]The content is relevant to the topic, up to date, and pretty cohesive. The only problem might be that you used a whole bunch of jargon, which isn't necessarily a problem, but you might want to go through and eplain things a little more simply.
Tone and Balance
[edit]Tone and balance evaluation
[edit]The content is neutral, doesn't have any outrageous claims, and avoids under or overrepresenting anything. Again, the only issue with tone is that it reads like it came directly out of a scientific journal, which I think Wikipedia is trying to avoid.
Sources and References
[edit]Sources and references evaluation
[edit]It doesn't look like you actually used all of your sources yet, so either you're not done or you've forgotten to label some things. The sources you did link seem legitimate and helpful, and I'm sure they're everything you need to cover the topic.
Organization
[edit]Organization evaluation
[edit]The subsection you decided to add seems appropriate, and adds important information to the article. I think you put it in an appropriate spot, it wouldn't have worked under another subsection. The real question is, where are you going to put it in the article? Where it ends up will determine its effect on the entire article.
Images and Media
[edit]Images and media evaluation
[edit]I see no image, I can't help you here.
Overall impressions
[edit]Overall evaluation
[edit]Overall, this seems like an excellent addition to the article. It's a little complex, word wise, but adds important information that will increase the quality of the article. Just look at adding in your sources, and making sure the language doesn't get too weighed down for people to follow. Good job!