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Studiesin...

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User:Studiesin.../Cult of Artemis at Brauron
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Cult of Artemis at Brauron

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Overall you've made the article a lot more readable, before it felt kind of like glued together information, and now it feels more like an informational essay. There are more additions and references to other wikipedia articles and characters mythologically related to Artemis which helps with context. Before the article had no images, and this adds images, the only addition I can suggest here is maybe a image of a krokoton, since it is described pretty thoroughly in the article and I immediately wanted to look up a picture of it. Under the participants section, you could maybe reframe the quote so it happens in the middle of the paragraph to make the section more readable? Not necessary maybe just a tiny suggestion. Under "Effects on Greek Cultural Attitudes" I would maybe suugest linking the sculpture within you explanation, and just describing the piece and why it was important. I really enjoyed reading about this topic that I had only heard minimally about before, you've done a lot of great work! Good luck with everything!