User:Sewinginthepast
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Article Problems
[edit]Lead Section
- More intro than summary
- Too much information
- Not concise; doesn’t overview topic
- Needs images
- Only 1 citation
- Page title not in first sentence
- Link to WWII & art sooner
- More encyclopedic
Layout Problems
- Sections are in confusing order
- Suggested new sections:
- Destruction of Art
- War-Inspired Art
- Artists in the War
- Within new sections, there can be more accessible subsections (with info in current sections)
Content Problems
- Original research/personal essay style needs to be altered (especially in first section)
- Needs more images throughout article
- Add more citations throughout
- Style needs to be more neutral
Lead Problems
- Good lead overall
- Last paragraph unnecessary (can be a section later on)
- Needs info box
Layout Problems
- Not sure if the lists and lists of books is necessary for this specific article (separate page?)
- Not enough subsections
- Development & Approach sections could potentially be combined (Concept & Creation?)
- New section about publication history (move Translations section & other content here)
- Add Awards as a subsection in the Reception section
Content Problems
- The excessive Reception section needs to be condensed.
- Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
- Original research/personal essay style & subjective tones need to be altered
Lead Problems
- Needs more in the info box
- Needs images
- Needs more information in lead paragraph to be considered a summary
Layout Problems
- Too much time spent on character descriptions (new page for characters?)
- Missing a number of sections on series creation, reception, publication history, etc.
Content Problems
- Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
- References need to be added in a majority of the character analyses.
- Some excessive and unnecessary details need to be condensed.
- More general info about the book series, in general, needs to be added.
Potential Articles to Edit
[edit]Articles Needing Improvement
[edit]- Article flagged as needing more citations
- Article needs to be verified
- Article is lacking quite a bit of content
- Article flagged as needing changes in tone
- Article seems to casual
- Article's layout needs to be reorganized