User:OwensSar000/Intracellular parasite/Ciarajarmain Peer Review

Peer review

This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

• Whose work are you reviewing? OwensSarooo
• Link to draft you're reviewing: Intracellular parasite

Lead

Guiding questions:

• Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? It could be longer to include the sections later in the article.
• Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes.
• Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No
• Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Can have a section on disease.
• Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is concise.

Content

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
• Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I think more could be added on diseases.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added neutral? Yes.
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No.
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No, a good spread of sources.
• Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes.
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes.
• Are the sources current? For the most part, oldest is 1967
• Check a few links. Do they work? Yes.

Organization

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Yes, In the Invasion section:
  • "This is the use of a actin-myosin motor that is connected the Intracellular parasites cytoskeleton" should be "This is the use of an actin-myosin motor that is connected the Intracellular parasites cytoskeleton"
  • Keep it consistent with capitalization, sometimes Intracellular is capitalized and sometimes it is not
  • "This parasite will attach its self to the host cell while increasing the intracellular calcium , which in turn disrupts the actin ,at the cite of attachment, causing the host cell to create a lysosomal-barrier around the disruption." has off spacing with the commas should be "This parasite will attach its self to the host cell while increasing the intracellular calcium, which in turn disrupts the actin, at the cite of attachment, causing the host cell to create a lysosomal-barrier around the disruption.:
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

• Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? Yes, gives a visual to help understand.
• Are images well-captioned? Yes.
• Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Yes
• Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Yes

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

• Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? Yes
• How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? Yes
• Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? Yes
• Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? Yes

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

• Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
• What are the strengths of the content added? The image and the examples of different types is helpful.
• How can the content added be improved? Adding a section on disease, expanding the lead to introduce the sections, I would flip the Facultative and Invasion sections so Facultative and Obligate are back to back (just a suggestion).

Overall evaluation

Good job! A few informative article with just a few minor edits!