User:NotJuicetin

Bio

About me

Hi, I am a running start student and I play for the Marysville Getchell Golf team, the season has not started yet so I am in jv still. My interests are golf, basketball, and piloting! My main goal for my future is to become a commercial pilot so I am able to travel around the world! As for college wise, I want to get an IT degree as a backup just in case I back out of piloting. I have three dogs at the moment, two chihuahua wiener dogs and one lab boxer mix. I'm also interested in shoes (mostly Nike) such as Jordans and dunks. My family consists of my mom and Dad and my sister, my sister 6 years older than me and they all work at the same company. I am also big about working out at the gym! I go 4 days a week and i have 2 break days (the weekends). Day 1 is chest day, day 2 is back day, day 3 is leg day and day 4 is arms. I try to fit in at least 15 minutes of cardio each day I work out.

My Wikipedia interests.

If I do anything on Wikipedia, I will plan to write pages about history such as Greek history and Egyptian history. Since I was in elementary, I've always have been fascinated over the history of the Egyptians and the Greeks, it would be very nice to add on information onto a page about history of the Greeks and Egyptians since I have been learning about them for years. I also hope to write my own page about one of the two that doesn't exist. I hope to help accomplish a better understanding of what happened in history and what possibility's might have occurred instead of their religious beliefs.

Article Evaluation

The horror game industry has always been An interest of mine. I really like to read Wikipedia pages of the game in case I missed some things, with that in question I visited the Outlast article on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: lack of citations on A majority of the article, Irrelevant sections that go off the topic of the game, and repeating parts in the article."

Citations

There are multiple citations, in fact, there are A great amount of citations in the article. The thing that concerns me while reading the article though is the fact that the whole section called "Plot" has no citations at all. This section of the article could use a great amount of citations, this could help make the section more trusting and feel not as made up to the reader.

Irrelevant sections

There are multiple irrelevant points made in the article but one section was completely irrelevant. The section that I am talking about is the "Sequels", there is no need to have a whole section on the sequel when there are whole other Wikipedia pages about it that you could look at instead. This makes the page feel longer and more filled.

Repeating parts

There are repeating parts inside the article. One of the repeating parts is the fact they talk about the release of the sequel of the game and then have a whole section called "Sequels" about it later on. The beginning of the article tells the release of the game and the sequels as well as the PS4 release date, later on in the article they repeat the same exact things.

Conclusion

I would say that this article is helpful in some ways such as the reviews of the game so u know what other people think before you buy it. In other ways, though the article feels un-factual in major points such as the plot, this could be bad if you just trying to know what happens without actually playing the game. Another thing is that the page is unusually longer than it should be considered that there are parts that are either repeating or irrelevant to the game itself.