User:Mcramer2017
Kristin's Peer Review
[edit]Hi Mcramer2017,
After reviewing the article you chose, I have a few suggestions on information you could potentially add during your editing process:
- This article doesn't seem to have much information so any additional information/citations that you could add would be a great improvement
- Expand the lead section - it's very limited
- If you can find the information, maybe add more sections pertaining to diet, predators, physiology, and adaptations to their environment
- I would also move the last little bit under the "Interaction with humans" section about their status (near threatened) to the section on conservation -- seems like it would fit better there
Just a few thoughts, happy editing!
-Ktreat88
Mcramer2017's Peer Review Response
[edit]Hello Ktreat88,
Thank you very much for your peer review of the Indo-Pacific Humpbacked Dolphin Wikipedia article. I completely agree that this article had much room for improvement. I developed a draft of the article in my Sandbox section, taking into account your various comments and suggestions. Firstly, I heavily expanded the "Lead" section, organizing it in a manner that made it far more wholesome. Generally, I made major contributions to all sections of the article, including the inclusion of more reliable citations (articles from peer-reviewed journals).
I specifically implemented your suggestions on the development of information about the species' dietary habits and physiology. I am currently in search for more information about their natural predators (to provide a full ecological-structure perspective) as well as specific evolutionary adaptations they may have developed for their specific habitat.
If you would like to take a look at my developed draft, please refer to my Sandbox (lower sections).
Thanking you in advance! Mcramer2017 (talk) 20:07, 4 March 2018 (UTC)mcramer2017