User:Kwyilreth
My name is Kyle Wirth. What I'm really interested in is the sciences and how the world works. I really enjoy going outside and spending my time in nature. I love seeing all the different animals and plants. Most of my time I spend playing with my dog or working my job. When I get extra free time I spend it by hiking or watching shows on Netflix if I'm too lazy to go outside. The only thing in this world I really hate is how society today is so antisocial because everyone is always on their cellar telephone.
If I was to stay on Wikipedia for a long time I would edit articles on different animals. That's the only topic that I'm even slightly informed about more than the average person. It's also one of the few things that I actually care about. I would hate for someone to be misinformed on any knowledge about animals. After the movie jaws a bunch of innocent sharks were killed even more than usual. I never want something like that to happen again.
Article Critique
[edit]I visited the Sea snail page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: lack of citations, unnecessary sentences, not all facts are backed up by a source. This article very clearly needs some improvement so more people can understand sea snails. It's a pretty small article but for some reason, it has a lot of bias information. If I was to give the article a rating out of five stars I would give it a two.
The article is completely and utterly missing citations. The only citation the article has is just a reference to another Wikipedia page. As soon as I got the page there is a huge box that says that this article has multiple issues. The box seems to be correct as the whole article is just completely a mess with lack of citations.
This article is full of unnecessary sentences and bias info. In the 2nd paragraph, the writer starts describing obvious info. The writer states how underwater gastropods without shells aren't sea snails. This is completely useless in an article about sea snails and is super obvious to everyone. Also under definition, there's the sentence, "determining whether some gastropods should be sea snails is not always easy." This is just an opinion and has no place in a scientific article.
The article claims a lot of facts but doesn't site them. Under Anatomy, the final sentence is that "many, but not all sea snails have an operculum." While this may be true or not the article doesn't say where this fact is from. Also in the first paragraph, it says that many different types of sea snails are consumed by humans but doesn't cite this. I'm pretty sure that this fact is blatantly untrue especially because the writer doesn't feel like citing their claims.
The small change in the article I made was that I deleted the sentence that talked about how underwater gastropods without shells aren't sea snails because it's completely unnecessary in this article.
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