User:Kvkaplan/sandbox

During the breeding season, males of various stingray species such as Urolophus halleri, may rely on their ampullae of Lorenzini to sense certain electrical signals given off by mature females before potential copulation

For my Draft Paragraph:

My plan is to change the "Diet" Sub-title on the Stingray page to "Feeding Behavior and Diet."

A common predatory technique that has been observed among benthic elasmobranchs is ambushing behavior. As it pertains to rays, skates, carpet sharks, and angel sharks, the predator searches for suitable hiding environments such as sand, pebbles, coral, or algae that match its coloration or patterning, which is also known as aggressive mimicry. Ambushing is a behavior in which a predator relies on its coloring, body structure, or the environment as an advantage in concealing itself while waiting on unsuspecting prey to enter its striking range. There have been recorded occasions where this form of ambushing behavior of stingrays and related benthic sharks has been directed towards a common prey type. One example of this occasion involves the chokka squid, (Loligo vulgaris reynaudii), which spawns in the inshore coastal habitats around South Africa. The diamond ray (Gymnura natalensis) frequently relies on aggressive mimicry as it blends into sandy habitats waiting for preoccupied female chokka squids who are busy spawning. Diamond rays then shoot off from the bottom substrates and use suction feeding to ingest the spawning squids and their eggs. Suction feeding works in conjunction and is aided by ram filter feeding, which is demonstrated by pelagic rays including the manta ray (Manta birostris) and the closely-related devil rays (Mobula sp.). Many of the pelagic rays have external mouth structures called cephalic lobes that assist in siphoning in water and planktonic organisms as the rays swim in acrobatic patterns in these patches of food.

I feel like this is a very informative and well written paragraph; however, as my understanding exists it doesn't quite make sense to say "suction feeding in the form of ram filter feeding." These to methods are completely separate and to me it would be more correct to say suction feeding aided by ram filter feeding. I would also link ram feeding incase the reader didn't know what that is. In addition, though it may seem obvious, I might put something right before the citation 3 in the sentence to indicate that behavior is ambushing or finish describing it after the second sentence. In my opinion it leaves off after the second sentence on describing ambushing behavior until the example which doesn't clearly state that it is ambushing behavior. I know this is picky and may seem obvious but your audience may often be young children and they might not pick up on it. I do not see any grammatical errors of concern. Personally I may stick to sentences and eliminate the semicolon after spawning, but that's more personal opinion. Overall I believe there is great information here and it is well written. Although, a simple rearrangement of the facts may help the read comprehend it better. Alh583 (talk) 17:01, 14 February 2017 (UTC)

Nicely written addition Kramer. I was able to follow this and it was interesting to read. I also thought the review was well done and I agree with the clarification indicated in the review. I am not an expert, so any wording that clarifies a term makes the entry more understandable. Well done to both of you. Marciaharrison (talk) 14:41, 17 February 2017 (UTC)