User:Kateresnek/sandbox
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Article Evaluation
[edit]The article about Life Is Strange: Before the Storm , a video game prequel could be improved. To start, throughout the article the date format (day-month-year) is used. Being that this is an American game and the tradition way of writing dates in the US follows the (month-day-year) format the dates could be changed to follow the US format. Additionally, in the "gameplay" section the sentence, "The player assumes control of sixteen-year-old Chloe Price, three years prior to Life Is Strange." should be altered to say "prior to the events of Life is Strange" in order to make it more clear. A more clear explanation of the gameplay feature "backtalk" would be useful. The "plot" section could also be cleaned up a lot. More uses of explanitory words such as "protagonist" could be added to help the reader understand the plot even if they have not played the game. Also not much of the plot description is cited and it needs to be. Finally, the "reception" section is very confusing. Not only could it be formatted in a better way that separates each review but also perhaps a review that was not positive or a counter argument could be quoted.
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