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User:Karamchand98/Naxalite–Maoist insurgency/Conner.hobson Peer Review

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Peer review

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General info

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Lead

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Guiding questions:

Lead evaluation

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N/A. Since you are adding to an existing article, I don't think a new lead is necessary.

Content

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Content evaluation

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The content of your section is really fascinating. I like how you've explored the ideology of the Naxalite movement and followed the emergence of it historically. The main article was sorely missing a section like this.

Tone and Balance

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Tone and balance evaluation

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I think your section was written in a very neutral way. You don't insert your opinions and it's difficult to tell your position, so I'd say you've achieved the encyclopedic voice.

Sources and References

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Sources and references evaluation

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The sources are recent and the links work. I'm not an expert on this, but I'm not sure if the sources could be considered academic. The Guardian isn't, but I'm not sure about Hindustan Times or TheDiplomat.com. I would guess these sources are fine to include, as long as academic sources are used to supplement them.

I think maybe you've relied too heavily on one source (History of Naxalism-Hindustan Times) since it is cited repeatedly throughout.

Organization

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Organization evaluation

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Your piece doesn't contain many grammatical errors, but some of it is a little dense and could be reworded for readability. Since this is an encyclopedia, you may want to cut back on the complexity of your sentences, which often contain multiple sub-clauses. This is great for an essay, but maybe not wikipedia.

You could also divide it into paragraphs so it isn't quite as imposing a wall of text.

These are just a minor suggestions; I found it to be well-written overall.

Overall impressions

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Overall evaluation

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Great work! Your article was interesting, well-written, and highly valuable for the main article. I think your main problem is sourcing; you'll need to find some academic sources to supplement the journalism you've used.