User:KamiEHornberger/Midwives in the United States
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[edit]There are a few different types of midwives:
- Those who aren't licensed
- professional midwives
- certified midwives
- certified nurse midwives
Midwives stepping in during covid-19 in the United States:
- during the covid-19 pandemic a lot of people didn't feel comfortable giving birth in hospitals, making midwives step in for those who couldn't.
First section: LM
[edit]Licensed Midwife (LM)[edit]
[edit]"A Licensed Midwife is a midwife who is licensed to practice in a particular state. As of 2018, licensure for direct-entry midwives, such as Certified Professional Midwives, is available in 31 states." [1] As a licensed midwife you have the option to practice alone or with others.
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May practice alone, or with others
History: (when it started)
[edit]Mary Breckinridge was an American, from Kentucky, U.S.A., who had traveled to England to become a Certified Midwife. She then brought the profession to the United States. Breckinridge was the first midwife in the United States, but wasn't the first ever midwife. The first midwife was, Floreta d'Ays, from the early 15th century. The first school of midwifery didn't begin in the United states until 1902.
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Statistics:
[edit]California had the highest employment of Midwives, and Massachusets having on 310 [2] as of May 2020.
| State of Employment | How Many are Employed? | Wage |
|---|---|---|
| California | 1,010 | $76.72 |
| Pennsylvania | 340 | $49.63 |
| New York | 490 | $60.66 |
| Texas | 450 | $40.88 |
| Massachusets | 310 | $62.19 |
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[edit]References
[edit]https://www.historyextra.com/period/early-modern/midwifery-childbirth-history-facts-call-midwife/
https://doh.wa.gov/sites/default/files/legacy/Documents/Pubs//679149.pdf
- ^ "Midwives in the United States", Wikipedia, 2022-02-28, retrieved 2022-03-05
- ^ "Nurse Midwives". www.bls.gov. Retrieved 2022-03-23.
PEER REVIEW RESPONSE-
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[edit]- History section, first sentence- there should be a comma after "In 1925", I wouldn't say "in country" that doesn't flow I suggest changing it to " brought over midwifery to the United States", "British speaking"- British is an accent, not a language they speak English so you wouldn't say they were British speaking you might be able to say something along the lines that that they were from England
- History section, second sentence- Mary Breckinridge didn't create the midwife profession in France in the 15th century, she was born in 1881 and was an American who traveled to England to become a certified midwife, she then brought it to the United States, I think you should definitely talk about her in the article but when you're writing cross check the information across multiple sources to ensure everything is correct.
- History section, third sentence- a citation to back up your information would help here
- History section- midwifes were in the United States before Mary Breckinridge so some things might need their wording changed
- I feel the last 2 sentence of the history section just don't belong in the section; good points just try finding somewhere else to put those points in. Also maybe expand on the past and how they learned what to do without schooling.
- Statistics section- "As this shouldn't come as a shocker" sounds like you're putting your own feelings into it, the tone of your writing should be neutral with just the information, I also think you can add more statistics to this section
- Statistics section- I don't think you should copy a chart directly from a website, try changing it up and making it your own
- Overall, there were only a few grammatical errors to be changed. I would really go back and cross check information and do some more research on the topic. It's a good start, but a lot of information isn't correct.