User:Jwheatley01/Calorie restriction
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Article Draft
[edit]Outline of the Article (These will not be the final headings for the article)
Introduction to Calorie Restriction
[edit]- Edit the grammar
- Add more information
- Remove information that is opinionated or may sound like the previous author is giving medical advice
- Remove unnecessary explanations
The History of Calorie Restriction
[edit]- Add this section to the article (it is needed before jumping into "Recommendations" (this was already there) and other information.
- Gives more information on the background of Calorie Restriction
Calorie Restriction: Research
[edit]- Reorganize the page. Instead of Health effects first, lets put research then the effects calorie restriction after.
- The flow of each section under research is off. Feels like the results are being thrown at you.
- Check the grammar add more evidence with citations.
Calories Restriction: Health Effects
[edit]- Now that the research has been discussed, go more into detail of the effects it has on humans and other species.
- There is not enough information within the side effect category.
- I am not liking the recommendations section.The title "recommendations" seems like it the previous author is trying to give medical advice. Try to change it.
- Needs more information and grammar check