User:Jugem Jugem 1945/Kat Calvin/MachInX19 Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
DFloresVVC, Crystat8462, Ewalker05, Anahi.0812
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:DFloresVVC/Kat Calvin
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Lead
The Lead introduces the subject well, and gets to the point on what the topic is about. the inclusion of Calvin's advocacy for Minorities in STEM fields could be expanded on, but aside from that everything is up to board.
Content
The content added is concise and relevant, but I feel there should be more. A few of the projects Calvin has created should be expanded on. While a Majority of the sources used are up-to-date, there are a few sources that are pretty old in comparison. Additionally, a lot of the big points feel glossed-over.
Tone and Balance
There doesn't appear to be any bias in the Article. The sources are used relatively evenly. It's a relatively short article, but there's no issues here.
Sources and References
The Sources are relatively up-to-date. Most of the content from the sources is reflected in the article. Maybe add/get more information about the organizations Kat is a part of, however. The links for the foundations provided work.
Organization
The Article is quick and to the point. There are a few grammatical slip-ups (namely some punctuation could help) but it's not a big deal at all. As a Biography it's well-spaced out.
Overall Impressions
This was a great article. A good Lead with great setup, but it does have a few small problems here and there. A lot of the traits for a good Article are there, though: A Neutral Tone, Even Sources, and Relevant information. Some of that information could be expanded on, however. Go into her studies, her entrepreneurship, and add more about her organizations. What have Spread the Vote and Project ID Done? Add that to your article.