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After reading the Wikipedia article about Hunt of a Lifetime, I understand that there are multiple issues with this article. There isn't enough information inside of this article. I plan to add more information to this article and give the reasoning on why this organization was created.

1. Hunt of A Lifetime is a nonprofit organization that helps, children fulfill their dreams of going on an amazing hunt. These children have or have had life-threatening diseases.
2. The President of this organization is Tina Pattison. Her son, Matt Pattison, was one of the many kids who had a life-threatening illness. He loved to hunt and fish. He had a dream hunt he had always wanted to go on, so his mom, Tina Pattison, started a fundraiser for him so that he could go on that dream hunt of his. In the Fall of 1998, they found Matt's dream hunt, which was a moose hunt.
3. Tina Pattison President Contact: Cell: 814-572-4387----> Toll Free: 866-345-4455----> James Pattison: Vice President.

Reading List

• Hazeltine, Charles. (2010). Hunt of A Lifetime(HOAL).
• Ito, Robert. (26 June, 2011). "When a dying kid's wish is to kill" Salon

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In 1998, Hunt of a Lifetime founder Tina Pattison decided to grant the wish of her stepson, Matt, diagnosed with lymphoma, and began to raise money for a moose-hunting trip. Matt was 19 and too old to qualify for help from the Make-A-Wish Foundation. However, Pattison successfully raised enough money to send him on the trip thanks to funds from various hunters and hunting-supply companies in the US and Canada.^[1] In 1999, Matt died of lymphoma. In that same year, the Make-A-Wish Foundation, responding to criticisms from animal rights groups and concerns over child safety, ceased granting hunting-related wishes. Cash donations collected at Matt's funeral were used to start the foundation.

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In 1998, Hunt of a Lifetime founder Tina Pattison decided to grant the wish of her stepson, Matt, diagnosed with lymphoma. Matt was 19 and too old to qualify for help from the Make-A-Wish Foundation, so Mrs. Pattison started raising money for him to go on his dream hunt. However, Pattison successfully raised enough money to send him on the trip thanks to funds from various hunters and hunting-supply companies in the US and Canada.^[1] In 1999, Matt died of lymphoma. In that same year, the Make-A-Wish Foundation, responding to criticisms from animal rights groups and concerns over child safety, ceased granting hunting-related wishes. Cash donations collected at Matt's funeral were used to start the foundation. This organization is nonprofit, and is used to help kids with life-threatening illnesses who want to go on a dream hunt. Today, Ted Nugent, is now the Director of Spirit for Hunt of A Lifetime. He is a host for kids that are battling a terminal disease. The support from the parents is unimaginable. These people love their kids and would hate to see them go. This organization will give these kids a once in a lifetime opportunity, taking them out on hunts and getting a trophy animal. You see, it's not only about getting a trophy animal; it's about the experience and meeting new people.

Original Contribution

http://huntofalifetime.org/

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