User:JeremyML/Hercules in ancient Rome/Camsara99 Peer Review
Peer review
[edit]General info
[edit]Content
[edit]- The content you've added is very well done, you're absolutely on the right track.
- This information is relevant to the initial wikipedia article, while still being interesting and new.
Content evaluation 10/10
[edit]Tone and Balance
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Some of the language gets a little bit shaky in regards to staying neutral
Tone and balance evaluation 9/10 - just minor mistakes that I've highlighted below!
[edit]Sources and References
[edit]Guiding questions:
- Your sources seem good.
- The source with a link works great.
- There could probably be more links directly to the primary sources, most of them are translated and available online for free.
Sources and references evaluation 9/10 - nothing wrong, but there's a little bit of room for improvement!
[edit]Organization
[edit]- Well done
Organization evaluation 10/10
[edit]Overall impressions
[edit]Guiding questions:
- You've done a really good job with this! I only had a few specific suggestions which I'll copy and past in below!
- The comparisons between Hannibal and Hercules must have been apparent to all educated sources at the time due to its mention from primary sources[2]. - Not neutral, try to stick more to “Primary sources often make comparisons between Hercules and Hannibal”. Try to remove any language that is not stating plain and neutral fact
- Propertius, whom in his poem 4.9 also mentions similar information as Macrobius. This is evidence that he was also using Varro as a source[3] - These sentences are just a bit choppy and could use some revising
- According to Livy (9.44.16) - You could just link to the section of Livy’s writing that you quoted.