User:JamesS&T3530/History of hospitals/Kelton T Back Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing JamesS&T3530's work on the history of hospitals.

Link to draft you're reviewing: User:JamesS&T3530/History of hospitals - Wikipedia
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): History of hospitals - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

Content

Antiseptics, anesthetics, and Germ Theory are all very relevant topics to the field of medicine and would definitely be implemented in hospitals. However, I would like some more specific examples of how these methods of pain management and enhanced views on the spread of disease were implemented in hospitals. For example, your partner has very good examples of the first use of x-rays by doctors to treat patients, as well as how the Glasgow Royal Infirmary became the first hospital with a radiology department.

I do see you do not yet have anything under 19th century medicine. I don't know if you've found anything yet related to that time, or if you plan on scraping that section. Hopefully you do have something, or can easily find it, to put in that section.

Organization

I think you can organize your headers better. You start off with '20th and 21st Centuries', then move on to '19th Century', then move onto '20th Century', and there is no 21st Century section to behold. Personally, I would rewrite the first header to 'Modern Medicine' to make it dissimilar from the following headers, but similar enough that it's still relevant to the lecture at hand. Also, do you plan on adding material to the 19th Century section? I would specify that in the lead or get rid of that section if you don't plan on adding anything.

Tone and Balance

Your tone looks pretty good, presenting the information as it is and not putting any point of view in the language. I would see if there are any positions on the hurdles antiseptics, anesthetics, and Germ Theory might have faced to become a major part of medicine, however, especially in the case of Germ Theory.

References

Going back to what I said in the Content paragraph, I believe you have a lot of opportunity to expand your references section by researching different hospitals or doctors on how they implemented antiseptics, anesthetics, and Germ Theory into their local hospitals, or developed new techniques that spread to other hospitals.

Images

Finding some images of old antiseptics and/or anesthetics would be cool, like old advertisements for medicinal Cocaine (that's also another good place you could do some research).