User:IsabellaCarufel/Social media in the fashion industry/Sabmarriie Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

IsabellaCarufel

Link to draft you're reviewing

https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/User:IsabellaCarufel/Social_media_in_the_fashion_industry?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Social media in the fashion industry

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead

Guiding questions:

• Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes.
• Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes.
• Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes.
• Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No. All the information that the lead has, goes in more depth in the content.
• Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The lead is overly detailed. The section that starts with "Since the global financial.." should have its own section and not part of the lead. The other two paragraphs below that section could probably fit within the content.

Content

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes. All content that was added to the article is relevant.
• Is the content added up-to-date? All the content looks like it is within the last 10 or so years, which is fairly recent. Although, something within the years of 2018 and so forth would also be nice to see how the industry is nowadays.
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Historical header/content, as mentioned above.
• Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Could probably add about how different cultures from different countries use social media and how they have impacted the fashion industry. For Facebook, I could be important to talk about how they collect data from third parties to create advertisement for their audiences.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added neutral? Yes.
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No. There are no claims that are heavily biased.
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No.
• Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Majority of content is backed up. Just remember to add citations to the Marc Jacobs section and Tommy Hilfiger.
• Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) Yes.
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes.
• Are the sources current? Majority of sources are current.
• Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes.
• Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) I really think that the sources that you used were really good. Continue doing a great job on those sources!
• Check a few links. Do they work? Yes! The sources do work. Try them yourselves and make sure that anyone can access them, not just people who have access to the library.
• Another thing that I want to add for sources is that I see you used a lot of quotations. Try to reduce the amount of quotation you use. Try to use quotation when you really need to, like if there is something that person said. Also, I don't think you need to add in text citation, such (author, 2010). You just have to add the citation.

Organization

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, it is clear and concise.
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? There were a few that I fixed, but other than that, no.
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Other than adding a historical section, it is well organized and allows reader to see and/or search for what they are looking for.

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media.

• Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? Yes. Included five different images.
• Are images well-captioned? Yes.
• Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? yes.
• Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Yes.

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

• Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Overall, the quality of the article has improved immensely with the information you added. It adds more history to the article, along with different perspective from different social media platforms.
• What are the strengths of the content added? The strength that I see is how in depth each section is and how well it is explained. Another strength is the overall variety. It is not just focused on one social media or one popular brand, it focuses on multiple places.
• How can the content added be improved? Just try to focus on the suggests that I made, along with the TA's, and I think it will be great! Great job and Good luck!