User:Eloize13
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The introduction for the Speech Sounds Wikipedia page states that, "It won the Hugo Award for Best Short Story in 1984." I'd like to add to this fact by changing the sentence to the following; It won Butler her first Hugo Award for Best Short Story in 1984. [1]
I'd like to make edits to the summary section as well. I'd like to edit the sentence, "In Los Angeles, a woman named Rye decides to seek out her only remaining relatives, a brother and his family in nearby Pasadena," to "In Los Angeles, a woman named Rye has lost her parents, husband, sister and children to the illness. Due to this isolation, she decides to seek out her only remaining relatives, a brother and his family in nearby Pasadena." I'd also like to change the contribution, "It is then she meets Obsidian, a man in a police uniform who stops to restore order and then offers her a ride in his car." I want to elaborate on the contribution, stating, "She then meets Obsidian, a man dressed in an LAPD uniform, an oddity in a society in which all governmental organizations have disintegrated. He stops to restore order, ending the fight by throwing an object which releases gas into the bus, causing everyone to exit and the fight to end. He then offers her a ride in his car."
I'd then like to add, "She initially refuses the offer of a ride, noting the gun he owns and fearing his intentions. However, he gestures persistently and removes his revolver to indicate he doesn't intend to harm her," before the sentence, "Confronted with the hostilities of her fellow passengers or the threat of walking the streets alone, she cautiously accepts the stranger's offer, and together they resume the trip out of the city."
All of these edits to the summary section can be cited to the existing reference in the article[2]