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Rough Draft of Flint Water Crisis
Location: The location of my added information will be in the subcategory of "Studies". The information that I will add will be directly under "Virginia Tech Water study". The information may be moved in between "Hurley Medical Center study" and "Virginia Tech Water Study" so the information may be in a more chronological order.
Title: The title of my entry will be called "West Virginia study". My reasoning behind this title is so that the title will continue to correlate with the latter.
Ten Main Points: The timing of when Flint changed its water source causing lead exposure Neuropsychological Effects of Lead Exposure Varying Fertility and Birth Outcomes The effect of young children being exposed to lead rich water Environmental Injustice Racial Injustice Neglected Flint residents EPA Similar situation in District of Columbia 10 years ago Increase in fetal deaths
Rough Passage: On August 7, 2017, West Virginia University published a study validating the correlation between the intake of lead contaminated water and the increase of fetal deaths along with miscarriages during November 2013 to March 2015. The study was led jointly by Daniel Grossman of West Virginia and David Slusky of Kansas University. The data was constructed over the course of two years focusing on the city of Flint and how the data differs among neighboring cites in Michigan. Data shows that after the city switched the water source to Flint's own river, fetal deaths rose 58% among women aged 15-49 compared to control areas. In late December 2014, the city of Flint received an EPA violation for having trihalomethane (TTHM) in the water. The same month, General Motors announced that they would no longer use Flint River due to having corrosive affects on engine parts. Even though the city of Flint was aware of the corrosive elements in the water, the Flint river would still be used for human consumption. A key issue is how the city of Flint ignored that humans were consuming water but GM switched water sources to maintain their product. Even though the government of Flint were aware of the dangers of the contaminated water, residents remained ignorant to the potential health affects. −More information will be added as well as the fixing of grammar.
Works Cited: Campbell, C.; Greenberg, R.; Mankikar, D.; Ross, R.D. A Case Study of Environmental Injustice: The Failure in Flint. Int. J. Environ. Res. Public Health 2016, 13, 951.
Holodny, Elena. “Fetal deaths rose 58% after Flint switched to lead-Poisoned water.” Business Insider, Business Insider, 22 Sept. 2017, www.businessinsider.com/flint-water-crisis-fertility-rates-2017-9.
Ingraham, Christopher. “Flint’s lead-Poisoned water had a ‘horrifyingly large’ effect on fetal deaths, study finds.” The Washington Post, WP Company, 21 Sept. 2017, www.washingtonpost.com/news/wonk/wp/2017/09/21/flints-lead-poisoned-water-had-a-horrifyingly-large-effect-on-fetal-deaths-study-finds/.
Grossman, Daniel, and David Slusky. “The Effect of an Increase in Lead in the Water System on Fertility and Birth Outcomes: The Case of Flint, Michigan.” Working Paper Series, no. 17, ser. 25, 7 Aug. 2017, pp. 1–64. 25.
Mona Hanna-Attisha, Jenny LaChance, Richard Casey Sadler, Allison Champney Schnepp, “Elevated Blood Lead Levels in Children Associated With the Flint Drinking Water Crisis: A Spatial Analysis of Risk and Public Health Response”, American Journal of Public Health 106, no. 2 (February 1, 2016): pp. 283-290.
Kennedy C, Yard E, Dignam T, et al. Blood Lead Levels Among Children Aged <6 Years — Flint, Michigan, 2013–2016. MMWR Morb Mortal Wkly Rep 2016;65.ElgeStevens (talk) 04:21, 10 November 2017 (UTC)
Article evaluation -- [Biram Dah Abeid]
[edit]Notes - Biram Dah Abeid is an West African activist whose goal is to abolish slavery. -Biram hails from Mauritania which suffers from a number of Human Rights issues, one was slavery. -Biram's drive to abolish slavery comes from his parents once being slaves in Mauritania. -Biram's life as an activist gain ground at the age of 19 when he started the "National African Movement" to fight for equal rights for people of color. -The "Initiative for the Resurgence of the Abolitionist Movement" was founded by Biram Dah Abeid himself.
Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? -It is a relatively short article that focuses on and only on the subject himself, Biram Dah Abeid.
Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? -The text seems mutual and respectful towards both sides.
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? -The audience is shown how Biram wants to positively affect his community as a whole and what obstacles lay ahead of him.
Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
-All of the links on the page work and are closely related to the subject. Each fact is backed by a link that is written in text that can be fact checked. I don not see any bias in the writings.
Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? -Biram's recent activity isn't up to date as of Sept.2017 and some pictures of him demonstrating along with his organization couldn't hurt.
Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? -No conversations are being held, however someone is letting it be known that they have edited material and had posted a link to back up his edit.
How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? -It seems this article hasn't been covered much and it is not a part of WikiProjects.
How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? -The article covers more personal life rather than the outline of what one has done to benefit the world as a whole.ElgeStevens (talk) 21:56, 5 September 2017 (UTC)
Flint Water Crisis
[edit]The topic I chose is the Flint Water Crisis. The Flint Water Crisis has been in the making since early 2014 due to the changing of water sources. The crisis left tens of thousands of Flint residents exposed to contaminated water. Not only has the issue been ongoing, efforts seem to be sluggish. The article is lacking the input of Washington D.C.'s similar problem in the early 2000's so that can be added on. This topic needs more exposure and funding so that we can keep our citizens safe from potentially fatal contaminants.
To keep moving forward, all of us citizens must work together to achieve a common goal. One goal among many is human rights. Every person in America shouldn't have to stress whether or not it's safe to drink a sip of water. They shouldn't have to fear of becoming sick by drinking their tap water in their homes that they pay for. Looking back on my skimming of this article, this crisis has been going on for far too long. This crisis has seen two presidents and its seems that drinkable water is not a necessity. Further exposure on this topic can push officials to make a change sooner so that Flint residents can use the water they have in their homes as opposed to going to a bulk store to buy liters of water.
Sources https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Flint_water_crisis#2007.E2.80.932014 https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Lead_contamination_in_Washington,_D.C._drinking_water#2006.E2.80.932010:_EPA.2C_CDC.2C_expert_reports_faulted https://www.nytimes.com/interactive/2016/01/21/us/flint-lead-water-timeline.html http://www.freep.com/story/news/columnists/rochelle-riley/2016/02/06/dr-mona-hanna-attisha-goes-doctor-global-hero/79772514/ ElgeStevens (talk) 17:04, 28 September 2017 (UTC)
Flint Water Crisis Causes Precipitous Fertility Drop
[edit]The title "Flint Water Crisis Causes Precipitous Fertility Drop" is self explanatory. To be clear, the argument is that the contamination of the water in Flint, Michigan has caused an increase in miscarriages and fetal deaths among those who were exposed. The authors, Daniel Grossman of West Virginia University and David Slusky of Kansas University both want United States of America to know how the water contamination has affected Flint residents. The authors valuable data shows that there was a 50% increase of miscarriages between November 2013 to March 2015. Understanding that this information is vital, I will add the statistics of their data to Wikipedia's "Flint Water Crisis" while successfully citing them in hopes of dodging lawsuits.
The authors Grossman and Slusky have brought this critical issue to a bigger spotlight by concentrating on a specific issue. We as Americans understand that the water crisis is bad, but we do not grasp how bad it is until it can directly relate to us. Focusing on how women are losing their children before they are born can entice someone far away from Flint to help. These viewers that are lured can either be someone who loves kids or is expecting a child themselves. This data is relevant to me because I someday hope to have children and I would hate that my government could care less about my family's well being. This article changes human rights history by offering a stance that most won't pay mind to. Those who can't fight for themselves rely on others...these others are Daniel Grossman and David Slusky. Lastly, this topic has sufficient research opportunities simply due to the fact that the Flint Water Crisis is ongoing. Even after the people resolve this issue, there will be an ongoing discussion on why this crisis occurred.ElgeStevens (talk) 01:17, 5 October 2017 (UTC)
Works Cited Grossman, Daniel, et al. “Flint Water Crisis Causes Precipitous Fertility Drop.” Flint Water Crisis Causes Precipitous Fertility Drop | PressReleasePoint, Press Release Point, 2 Oct. 2017, www.pressreleasepoint.com/flint-water-crisis-causes-precipitous-fertility-drop.ElgeStevens (talk) 01:17, 5 October 2017 (UTC)