User:Cepropst/Vocal jazz/Maiab3 Peer Review
General info
[edit]- 1. Whose work are you reviewing?
- Cepropst
- 2. Link to draft you're reviewing
- - LINK HERE
- 3. Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- - LINK HERE
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]- Lead
- The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added by my peer. I appreciate how she removed the fluff from the original article, and stuck to a succinct definition of what vocal jazz is/was-- including an overview of what the rest of the article would entail.
- The introductory sentence was kept the same, which I found fitting.
- Some of the content was briefly mentioned, but we were not given a huge amount of info (I only saw this with the topic of 'New Orleans jazz').
- Content
- The content was excellent, as it was informative and neutral.
- I found it interesting that the history of jazz ended in the 1950s, and I would have appreciated to learn more about how it evolved into modern day time.
- The article does deal with Wikipedia's equity gaps, and does a great job at mentioning the topics related to historically underrepresented populations.
- Tone and Balance
- The content added was neutral, and I liked how she removed notable singers from the lead and created an entirely new subsection for this individuals. The original article had a feeling of favoritism with specific singers.
- There is no persuasion, under/overrepresentation or bias that is apparent within the article.
- Sources and References
- There is a good variety of sources from reputable websites and literature from a diverse array of authors, with the content accurately reflecting what is presented in said sources.
- I will say that some of the articles are out of date (from 1997-2015), and it may be helpful to have more current ones cited.
- All of the links work!
- Organization
- All of the content is well-written, and I really enjoyed learning more about vocal jazz.
- Mentioned earlier, but I appreciated how the notable singers were moved into a new subsection instead of in the lead.
- No grammatical errors.
- Images and Media
- N/A (no images or media within the article).
- Overall Impressions
- Great job, I really liked reading the article and felt that it was a strong start!
- The only major thing to improve would be adding more information, but that will come when the time is right. Thank you for sharing with us!