User:Carolin Zion/Magnetospirillum/CalmPeach Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Carolin Zion and Mannsely
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Carolin Zion/Magnetospirillum
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Magnetospirillum
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]I do think that the additions to the lead would be good since this is missing information, and the original isn't very informative. It is a concise lead, and it is well written since it would flow better with the original.
Content
[edit]I like the addition of the formation and morphology section since none of this information is in the original. I think these would be great contributions to the page. The habitat sentences could use some work since they are choppy, I would probably make it into one or two sentences.
Tone/Balance
[edit]A section in the shape/arrangement section could be edited because it isn't neutral with, "although some have been found to have chaotic arrangements."[1] Instead of this I would put that chaotic arrangements have been found in some species, or something along those lines for Wikipedia.
Sources/References
[edit]All of the sources are great, but I would add more citations like for the uses section, besides that I wouldn't change anything.
Table
[edit]I would fill out the table more since it is a required section. I recommend looking up biochemical characteristics of Magnetospirillum to find more information.
Organization
[edit]The organization is perfect in my opinion, so I wouldn't change it.
Overall Impressions
[edit]I had a great overall impression of the changes, but it does need a bit of work here and there. However, if you aren't looking for changes, I wouldn't have seen any of these issues besides the table being empty.
Good work! CalmPeach (talk) 21:23, 5 March 2022 (UTC)
- ^ Geelhoed, Jeanine S.; Kleerebezem, Robbert; Sorokin, Dimitry Y.; Stams, Alfons J. M.; Van Loosdrecht, Mark C. M. (2010-01-26). "Reduced inorganic sulfur oxidation supports autotrophic and mixotrophic growth of Magnetospirillum strain J10 and Magnetospirillum gryphiswaldense". Environmental Microbiology. 12 (4): 1031–1040. doi:10.1111/j.1462-2920.2009.02148.x. ISSN 1462-2912.