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Lead

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Open sentence cleary describes topic. However, the rest of the lead does not introduce the article as currently written. I do think it would be a nice lead if the article only focus on Alaska Native Plant Society. I believe the lead is currently function as a overview of the whole topic instead of an intro to it.

Content

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The article doesn't have a clear topic. It could be about Verna Pratt, the Alaska Native Plant Society, or about Alaska native plants. The sections don't relate very well to each other and the titles lead me to believe they are different topic entirely. This is especially unclear in the second section. How does the book relate to the Alaska Native Plant Society besides a former member publishing it? Did her time in the club impact the book or the club give edits/suggestions on the book? Additionally, the Alaska Plant Section has enough content to be its own article and doesn't fit well when focusing on the society.

Tone and Balance

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The tone is neutral and does not appear to have any bias in article. 10/10

Sources and References

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Sources were up to date and all links worked. 10/10

Organization

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Some comma and capitalization errors. Additionally, some phrases need to be reworded but it is not heavily impacting the readability of the article.

The article struggles with organization.

Some Suggestions:

  • Pratt served as its first State President Through 1988,
    • Pratt served as the first State President through 1988,
  • Pratt's husband Frank Pratt was the editor of their newspaper,
    • Pratt's husband, Frank Pratt, was the editor of their newspaper,
  • which was held from 1982-1985, while this was going on the members
    • which was held from 1982-1985, during the event the members
  • the goal is to give the youth education about conservation and preservation issues
    • the goal is to educate the youth about conservation and preservation issues
  • Shortly after serving as State President for AKNPS Pratt wrote the novel
    • Shortly after serving as State President for AKNPS, Pratt wrote the novel
  • From her personal experience learning about the wildflowers of Alaska with her experience of teaching on the subject of wildflower identification
    • From her personal experience learning about the wildflowers of Alaska to her experience of teaching on the subject of wildflower identification
  • people notice when it comes to plants
    • people notice when observing plants
  • other plant features and aspects also got taken into account and are important to the identification.
    • other plant features and aspects are important to the identification and must be taken into account.
  • Elevations in the state go up to 20,320 feet in height.
    • Elevations in the state reaches up to 20,320 feet.

Images and Media

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Images are appropriate and are very useful visual to someone who is not familiar with very many native plants.

Checking the talk page

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NA

Overall impressions

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Article has lots of good information, but struggles with organization and some grammatical issues. The style and tone are appropriate for wikipedia.

Overall evaluation

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