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User:Amy YDY/Lusheng/Yiwen122 Peer Review

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Hello Amy, I like the topic you chosen it is pretty unique and interesting to look at. Few suggestions to your article: First of all make sure you write reference to each paragraph, add direct link after each paracgraph/ sentence. I briefly looked at all the resources you listed, I think they are all reliable sources so that is good, just added references after each section. Secondly is ‘leading’ section, based on the sections you wrote/ added on ‘history’ and ‘constrcution’ I think you should add more summaries to leading section, just briefly write about it. Thirdly, the pictures you provide should be reliable: either first hand, or provide by wikipedia, do not use photos online. Finally, I suggest you to added more sections like: when the Lusheng will be used? For example: what kinds of festival, culture related etc, when people will use Lusheng? You can also use other famous instruments as references.  

Overall I think you did a great job, your composition is worth to learn from, and each section is clearly stated.