User:18jkalmar/Vilma Espín/Katherineamerica Peer Review
Peer review
[edit]General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing? 18jkalmar
- Link to draft you're reviewing: Vilma Espin
Proposed Edits
[edit]- I definitely think that you're onto something with the edits that you are proposing! I agree with your plan to add more information about her role in government and revolution. I wonder if you could add a subsection in the section about her role in the revolution about her work with gender?
Lead
[edit]Guiding questions:
- The Lead has been edited to focus more on the life of Vilma, instead of her husband.
- The way that this has been edited makes it very clear that this article will be strictly about Vilma Espin, and not have the focus be on her husband.
- The Lead discusses information that may be touched on later in the article that is about Espin's life as a feminist, and chemical engineer.
- The Lead is very concise
Lead evaluation
[edit]This Lead is very well written, and makes it very clear that the article will only deal with Vilma Espin and her life. It is concise and does not give lots of details, making it so that the reader would have to read the article to find out more about her.
Content
[edit]Content evaluation
[edit]The content of this article is relevant to the topic, up-to-date, and there does not appear to be anything missing, or anything that does not belong.
Tone and Balance
[edit]Tone and balance evaluation
[edit]The tone of this article is very neutral, and has been edited to focus less on her husband and her role as a mother/wife, and more on her personal achievements. If there is any additional information available about her role in the Federation of Cuban Women, I would love to see more about that, and her role in government, however those two sections do look very good!
Sources and References
[edit]Sources and references evaluation
[edit]The content is all backed by secondary, reliable sources. The sources used do reflect the literature that is available on the topic. The links all work.
Organization
[edit]Organization evaluation
[edit]The organization of this article is done very well! I particularly liked the jump from "Early life" to "Family," and from her role in the Cuban revolution, to in the Federation of Cuban Women, to her role in the government.
Overall impressions
[edit]Overall evaluation
[edit]Overall, the added content improves the quality of the article because it adds more information about Vilma Espin. The strengths of this are that is all is very neutral, and adds a lot more information. To improve this article, I would potentially cite a few more things in the text, and add more about her governmental work.