Template:Did you know nominations/Yad Sarah

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 00:26, 12 December 2011 (UTC)

Yad Sarah

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... ~~that one out of every two Israeli families has been helped by Yad Sarah, which lends out medical and rehabilitative equipment for home use, free of charge?~~

Reviewed: Bilsham Chapel
Comment: 5x expansion

Created/expanded by Yoninah (talk). Self nom at 00:27, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

Checks out. I rewrote the hook to avoid passive voice. – Muboshgu (talk) 02:40, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that Yad Sarah helps one out of every two Israeli families by lending medical and rehabilitative equipment for home use free of charge?

Hi Muboshgu, thanks for the review. The rewrite is a little misleading, though, and underemphasizes what is a pretty impressive survey result. I can't think of writing it in any other than the passive voice, though. What do you think about this alt?

ALT2: ... that Yad Sarah, the largest national volunteer organization in Israel, has over 6,000 volunteers – including its founder, Uri Lupolianski, former mayor of Jerusalem? Yoninah (talk) 17:26, 10 December 2011 (UTC)