Template:Did you know nominations/Trust Exercise (novel)
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:04, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
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Trust Exercise (novel)
[edit]... that American novelist Susan Choi remembers being really mad whilst writing her novel Trust Exercise?Source: [1]
- Reviewed: Wu Ziliang
Created by CAPTAIN MEDUSA (talk). Self-nominated at 12:28, 8 June 2019 (UTC).
A new hook is probably needed: it is not uncommon for authors to be mad while writing, and the hook lacks context as to how her case is special. In addition, the article needs a copyedit due to grammatical errors and typos. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 10:03, 9 June 2019 (UTC)
- ALT2:
... that in the book review of Trust Exercise, Ron Charles of The Washington Post wrote "This author never takes you where you thought you were going, but have faith: You won’t be disappointed."?Source:[2]
- Narutolovehinata5 How is this hook?___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 11:03, 9 June 2019 (UTC)
- It sounds like a rather bland hook sadly, even if it was reworded into a more succinct form of English. Give me a day or two and I'll try to help out with possible alternative hooks. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:15, 11 June 2019 (UTC)
- I apologize for the late reply. While I mostly came up with a blank, I did think of one suggestion: I found it interesting that the book seemed to have been at least partly inspired by both the election of Trump and the author's breakup with her husband. Perhaps a hook based on either or both might work? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:01, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
- It sounds like a rather bland hook sadly, even if it was reworded into a more succinct form of English. Give me a day or two and I'll try to help out with possible alternative hooks. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:15, 11 June 2019 (UTC)
- ALT3:... that the novel Trust Exercise's main plot about sexual assault was inspired from the Donald Trump Access Hollywood tape?
- Narutolovehinata5 How is this hook?____CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 09:08, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
It's a hookier hook, but due to possible BLP concerns as well as the Trump mention I think we may need a second opinion on its appropriateness. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:19, 11 July 2019 (UTC)
- I also fear there'd be a BLP neutrality issue in
directlyclosely associating sexual assault with the tape and Trump. What if this was a little closer to the Vulture.com source, with "was inspired by discussions [of sexual abuse which emerged] following the publication of the Donald Trump Access Hollywood tape?" Removing the bracketed part would make it less wordy, but also less clear. – Reidgreg (talk) 20:11, 28 August 2019 (UTC)
- I also fear there'd be a BLP neutrality issue in
- Full review needed by new reviewer, including the hooks—these has never been a basic review of the nomination. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:02, 28 August 2019 (UTC)
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Hook eligibility:
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- ALT0 and ALT2 are struck. ALT3, and Reidgreg's suggestion, are not in the article, so would need to be added. - Interesting: - ALT3, if it can be worded neutrally, and added to the article with appropriate citations, might well catch readers' attention. Something like:
- ALT4:... that the novel Trust Exercise was inspired by discussions about sexual abuse which followed the publication of the Donald Trump Access Hollywood tape?
- Personally, I find the reviewers' remarks intriguing, so I would suggest something like:
ALT5:... that reviewers wrote that the novel Trust Exercise "takes such an unexpected turn" and "never takes you where you thought you were going"?
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Overall: 
Earwig picks up the quotes, but they are clearly signalled as quotes, with citations.
- Reidgreg, would you like to consider ALT4 and ALT5, please, and if you prefer ALT4, do the necessary edits on the article? RebeccaGreen (talk) 15:17, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- Not my nom (I haven't read the book) but I tried adding for ALT4. – Reidgreg (talk) 18:11, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- Sorry, Reidgreg! and thank you, that provides a source and context for ALT4, and also rounds the article out a bit more (it seemed to finish a bit abruptly).
- @CAPTAIN MEDUSA: Would you like to consider ALT4 and ALT5? RebeccaGreen (talk) 18:50, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- RebeccaGreen, I prefer ALT4 .___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 18:53, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- Sorry, Reidgreg! and thank you, that provides a source and context for ALT4, and also rounds the article out a bit more (it seemed to finish a bit abruptly).
This now requires another reviewer to approve a hook, as I suggested two. Both now are included in the article with sources. The article creator prefers ALT4, and I think that is probably catchier for more people than ALT5, but I can't approve my own suggested hook. RebeccaGreen (talk) 19:00, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
Approving ALT4. Actually, it was another editor who suggested the wording for ALT4, just under ALT3, but without an ALT number, so I think it should be OK for me to approve it. Please let me know if it's not! RebeccaGreen (talk) 23:58, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
