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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:02, 20 December 2016 (UTC)

Taschenphilharmonie

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... that the Taschenphilharmonie earned prizes, playing classical music in pocket size, embedded in narration, for young children? prize 1, prize 2

Reviewed: Wilhelm von Debschitz

Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 17:33, 23 November 2016 (UTC).

Length, date, qpq, close paraphrase check ok. But the hook wording is a bit odd, I didn't fully understand the wording 'playing classical music in pocket size'. The term is expained in the article itself, but it doesn't work as such in the hook. Perhaps an ALT which explains the name itself? I propose ALT1: ... that the Taschenphilharmonie has been called 'the world's smallest orchestra'? --Soman (talk) 16:34, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

I miss the children, also I wasn't sure that the term, translated, is still a quotation, -

ALT2: ... that the Taschenphilharmonie, called the world's smallest orchestra, earned prizes for classical music embedded in narration for young children? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:43, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

for ALT2 --Soman (talk) 14:06, 2 December 2016 (UTC)

I came to promote this, but I can't see mention of any "prize-winning". There is also a reference in the last paragraph needing attention. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:57, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

I doubled the awards from their section to the prose and added a ref to the one by the house itself to which the concerts were moved. Hope that helps --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:59, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

Very well, I expect the awards bit is OK, but I don't like to see a bare url in the middle of the final paragraph immediately after the word "Gasteig". And what is the significance of the "=11=" two paragraphs earlier? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:27, 6 December 2016 (UTC)

So sorry about the bare url, an accident, I forgot to delete it after copying. Thank you for pointing that out. What can we do to clarify that "=11=" is the title of the piece? Quotation marks are against the MoS which wants composition titles italic if not songs etc. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:00, 6 December 2016 (UTC)