Template:Did you know nominations/Raymond Leane

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:43, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

Raymond Leane

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Raymond Leane

... that Raymond Leane (pictured) was described as the "foremost fighting leader" in the Australian Imperial Force? Source: Bean, C.E.W. (1937). The Australian Imperial Force in France, 1917. Official History of Australia in the War of 1914–1918. 4 (5 ed.). p. 307

Comment: My fourth DYK

Improved to Good Article status by Peacemaker67 (talk). Self-nominated at 04:59, 24 August 2017 (UTC).

@Peacemaker67: GA, new enough, neutral, sourced, offline hook source accepted as good faith. Two issues:

The quotation in the article says "AIF," not "Australian Imperial Force." I suggest rewording the hook to something like "the Australian Imperial Force's 'foremost fighting leader'" or similar ("the 'foremost fighting leader in the' Australian Imperial Force" would work too), to avoid changing the quotation.
The article uses "AIF" in the first paragraph, but only defines what it is in the second paragraph. I suggest changing it (see examples above) so that it is defined right away. --Usernameunique (talk) 08:16, 24 August 2017 (UTC)

Thanks. have implemented both suggestions. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:21, 24 August 2017 (UTC)

Great, all set. --Usernameunique (talk) 08:35, 24 August 2017 (UTC)