Template:Did you know nominations/Pankaj Chandak

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:23, 12 August 2017 (UTC)

Pankaj Chandak

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~~... that surgeon Pankaj Chandak was the first person ever to use 3D printing to help plan a kidney transplant into a child?~~ Source: His multidisciplinary work on integrating 3D printing into complex paediatric transplantation as a world first was awarded The Royal Society of Medicine Norman Tanner Medal 2016
- ALT1:... that surgeon Pankaj Chandak and his colleagues are believed to be the first-ever medical team to act in a television drama, namely The Crown? Source: Big-budget royal series The Crown saw a team of qualified surgeons used in a scene instead of actors...It is thought to be the first time real doctors have been used in a television production to add plausibility.

Reviewed: Mandatory eight count

Created by Whispyhistory (talk). Nominated by Nick Moyes (talk) at 01:37, 29 May 2017 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy compliance:

Adequate sourcing: - See below
Neutral:
Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing: - See below

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: —አቤል ዳዊት^?(Janweh64) (talk) 04:04, 1 July 2017 (UTC)

It is new enough; the article was created on May 22 and nominated exactly 7 days later on May 29. At 2837 characters, it is long enough.
The education section has serious issues. It is either unsourced or very weakly sourced. The only source in the section contains little biographical info. [1]
This sentence is unsourced: "Chandak has been involved in communicating science to broader audiences. This has included presenting live demonstrations for The BBC, Channel 5, British Science Festival2016 and London Open House." And there may be more sourcing issues.
Fails Earwig's Copyvio Detector —አቤል ዳዊት^?(Janweh64) (talk) 04:05, 1 July 2017 (UTC)

@Janweh64: Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate your comments and will work on them as I feel this is a good hook and page. Time is a factor but will make effort to improve this section.Whispyhistory (talk) 07:09, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

@Janweh64: The article creator (@Whispyhistory:) has now addressed the concerns you flagged, and we believe it is good to go for a second review attempt. The high Earwig Copyvio return has been reduced to 39% - but it was always the use of numerous unchangeable award names, hospital names and technical terms which caused most of that to be flagged. I don't think it can be reduced any further. Sorry for the delay in responding; I've been encouraging and guiding a new editor through this process - and I'm sure we've gained a really great new contributor to Wikipedia as a result. Regards from the UK Nick Moyes (talk) 11:50, 12 July 2017 (UTC)

New reviewer needed to complete this review. Based on the earlier review, checking for copyvio and close paraphrasing should be included, along with standard sourcing and neutrality checks. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:22, 24 July 2017 (UTC) (updated 05:00, 25 July 2017 (UTC))

The close paraphrasing issue has been resolved. More copyediting is needed, however, to smooth out the prose into proper sentences in the first paragraph under Education and in the Awards section. It's unclear what the second entry under Selected Bibliography has to do with Chandak. Aren't there more book chapters/papers to list here?
I question the ALT0 hook fact, which attributes the "first" to Chandak. The sources do not credit him alone; one says it was just his idea. (This should be fixed in the article.) Anyway, I like the ALT1 hook fact better, and I tweaked the wording. The ALT1 hook ref is verified and cited inline.
All in all, this is a rather rough start-class article. Are you able to find his CV to add details of his early life – his date of birth, birthplace, parents, etc – and fill out the infobox? Yoninah (talk) 21:01, 30 July 2017 (UTC)

@Yoninah: Thank you. Your review is much appreciated. I'm on the case and yes I have a cv which I will use. Will message you back once done.Whispyhistory (talk) 07:37, 31 July 2017 (UTC)

@Yoninah: I have edited more and reworded the awards section. Many sources confirm Chandak being the one to have the idea of the 3d printing. Of course, these plans will always need a team to carry them out and he does acknowledge them. I like the ALT1 hook too. I didn't think I could use his CV as a source so have concentrated on information from other sources. I'd like it to be a great page so help me if possible. Thank you.Is this OK now?Whispyhistory (talk) 08:02, 2 August 2017 (UTC)

@Whispyhistory: thank you for working on this. I removed the cite from the Personal section because the material in the article doesn't appear in the source. There is nothing wrong with using a CV (or even LinkedIn) for personal information. In fact, that's where you'll find personal, educational, and professional details that you wouldn't find elsewhere. Yoninah (talk) 01:49, 11 August 2017 (UTC)

@Janweh64: Sure. The CV is not available online, but will look over. Do I still need to do more on this before the dyk is accepted?Whispyhistory (talk) 12:12, 11 August 2017 (UTC)

No. This article meets the DYK start-class criterion even without a full Personal Life section. Thank you for removing the unsourced material. Here is a full review: New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. ALT1 hook ref verified and cited inline. QPQ done. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 12:44, 11 August 2017 (UTC)