Template:Did you know nominations/Josh Falkingham

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The result was: promoted by Yazan (talk) 12:16, 25 September 2012 (UTC)

Josh Falkingham

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... that Josh Falkingham scored a goal during his first match in the Scottish Football League First Division?

ALT1:... that Josh Falkingham was named in the PFA Scotland's Division Two Team of the Year in the 2011–12 season?
Comment: Created via WP:AFC, accepted submission on 18 September

Created/expanded by FaZyk (talk), Blethering Scot (talk). Nominated by Mentoz86 (talk) at 22:12, 18 September 2012 (UTC)

I'm not an English language expert, but shouldn't the first hook read "...scored a goal at his first match..." or "...during his first match..."? In any case, the article is new enough, big enough, with no policy problems. Both suggested hooks are within the character limit and cited in the article, but the first one is slightly more interesting, so it will definitely get my pick once the forementioned issue is settled. Cheers. – Kosm1 fent 18:44, 19 September 2012 (UTC)

I'm no English language expert either, but I believe "during" is better then "at". I have changed the hook to "during", and I guess the promoter could change it back to "in" if necessary. Mentoz86 (talk) 18:51, 19 September 2012 (UTC)

Excellent. Congratulations on a fine job. – Kosm1 fent 18:57, 19 September 2012 (UTC)

Just to let you both know, "in" and "during" would both be fine, but "at" just wouldn't make any sense at all in this context. Hope this helps, BigDom (talk) 10:17, 20 September 2012 (UTC)