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The result was: promoted by sst ✈ 14:23, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
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Huawei Watch

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... that the Huawei Watch is the first smartwatch of Huawei?
ALT1 ... that the Huawei Watch is the company's first smartwatch?

Created by Shwangtianyuan (talk). Self-nominated at 02:51, 29 September 2015 (UTC).

Length, newness, hook verified. There is limited close paraphrasing in the following text which has to be modified:
It's powered by a 1.2 GHz Qualcomm Snapdragon 400 processor with 512MB of RAM and 4GB of internal storage. Sensors include a gyroscope, accelerometer, vibration motor, and heart rate sensor. The Huawei Watch is made of 316L stainless steel with sapphire crystal glass on front. ...There is wireless support for WiFi and Bluetooth 4.1 LE, but there is no GPS receiver for run tracking or mapping without a smartphone connection.

Emphasis indicates where the paraphrasing occurs. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 16:06, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

All done.Shwangtianyuan (talk) 23:24, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

Please check the bolded lines and paraphrase them. I just bolded them. Thank you. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 23:30, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

Because it is the first time to write the article about smartwatch, so I referred other smartwatch articles and wrote these sentences. Sorry about that. These are the features of this watch.Shwangtianyuan (talk) 23:38, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

I understand. But they can still be rephrased, especially this: but there is no GPS receiver for run tracking or mapping without a smartphone connection. and this: The Huawei Watch is made of 316L stainless steel with sapphire crystal glass on front. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 23:45, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

I rephrased two sentences just now. Please review it. Thank You.Shwangtianyuan (talk) 07:04, 30 September 2015 (UTC)

You did not rephrase this: The Huawei Watch is made of 316L stainless steel with sapphire crystal glass on front.. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 14:45, 30 September 2015 (UTC)

I rephrased this sentence. The current sentence is "The case is 316L stainless steel with sapphire crystal glass on front."Shwangtianyuan (talk) 01:53, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

I don't think we are communicating here. This is almost the same sentence I told you to change. Look at this report. The red sentences are where the close paraphrasing is. Please change all of them. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 02:25, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

All done.Shwangtianyuan (talk) 03:49, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Good to go. ALT1 approved. Well done. Thank you. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 03:59, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

I have added a better phrased ALT1. Edwardx (talk) 10:24, 30 September 2015 (UTC)

Thank you Edwardx. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 14:45, 30 September 2015 (UTC)

The design section is almost entirely copied from here. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:36, 14 October 2015 (UTC)
Someone removed this part. Please check it. I didn't add this part.Shwangtianyuan (talk) 16:40, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
That's better, but I'm still concerned. For example "The watch can access calls, messages and emails without reaching for their phones" does not make sense, because it's almost identical to the source except for missing "Wearers" (the original subject). Nikkimaria (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Just as a clarification, The copyvio "Design" section was added eight days after my final comment on this review. Δρ.Κ. ^{λόγοςπράξις} 19:38, 15 October 2015 (UTC)