Template:Did you know nominations/Helping Hand (Body of Proof)
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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:18, 29 June 2012 (UTC)
Helping Hand (Body of Proof)
[edit]- ... that Body of Proof episode "Helping Hand" which features Dana Delany, was described as "comical", "touching" and "sweet" with the characters being a "real joy to watch"?
Created/expanded by M.Mario (talk). Self nom at 21:39, 23 June 2012 (UTC)
While the references, date, and length of the article look good, I'm not a fan of the hook. Listing all the critics' descriptions reads a little dry. Plus, why mention Dana Delany? She's not the sole focus of the critics you quote. I would recommend you propose an alt hook. I'll look it over once you post it. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 16:22, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- ALT1; that television show Body of Proof, which stars John Carroll Lynch as Bud Morris, was the center of the fourth episode; Helping Hand, with Bud being described as a "real joy to watch"? — M.Mario (T/C) 18:27, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- I don't like that one either, particularly the use of a semi-colon. Try to find some unusual facts that will pull in potential readers. Considering it aired last year, is there any interesting production info out there? I also recommend you carefully read through the article again, because I see a lot of typos ("the episodes murderer."; "Finally, she was glad it was not to "gory""; etc). Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 20:30, 28 June 2012 (UTC) Plus, "Helping Hand" was the show's third episode, not fourth. Ruby 2010/2013 20:31, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- I have just spell checked it, and I have found no spelling mistakes.
- ALT2 - that Body of Proof episode Helping Hand was directed by John Terlesky, best known for directing Ugly Betty which starred Tony Plana, who also appeared in this Body of Proof episode?
- A much better hook. Thank you. However, you haven't actually fixed any of the spelling errors. A normal spell check isn't going to notice that "episodes" should be "episode's". Go through it manually and fix that and other typos please, so that it will be fit to be seen on the main page. Regards, Ruby 2010/2013 21:29, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
Done - On further inspection, what makes this a WP:RS? I'm sure you can find a better source that verifies he appeared in those shows. Ruby 2010/2013 21:31, 28 June 2012 (UTC) Done
- A much better hook. Thank you. However, you haven't actually fixed any of the spelling errors. A normal spell check isn't going to notice that "episodes" should be "episode's". Go through it manually and fix that and other typos please, so that it will be fit to be seen on the main page. Regards, Ruby 2010/2013 21:29, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
- ALT2 - that Body of Proof episode Helping Hand was directed by John Terlesky, best known for directing Ugly Betty which starred Tony Plana, who also appeared in this Body of Proof episode?
- I have just spell checked it, and I have found no spelling mistakes.
- I don't like that one either, particularly the use of a semi-colon. Try to find some unusual facts that will pull in potential readers. Considering it aired last year, is there any interesting production info out there? I also recommend you carefully read through the article again, because I see a lot of typos ("the episodes murderer."; "Finally, she was glad it was not to "gory""; etc). Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 20:30, 28 June 2012 (UTC) Plus, "Helping Hand" was the show's third episode, not fourth. Ruby 2010/2013 20:31, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
