Template:Did you know nominations/Helen Alexander Archdale

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The result was: rejected by Vanamonde (talk) 07:03, 10 April 2017 (UTC)

Helen Alexander Archdale

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... that suffragist Helen Archdale was convicted of a breach of the peace and imprisoned for four days after interrupting a meeting in Dundee being held by the local MP, Winston Churchill? Source:Ewan, Elizabeth L. (2006). The Biographical Dictionary of Scottish Women. Edinburgh University Press. p. 16. ISBN 9780748617135.
- ALT1: ... that in 1926, suffragists Helen Alexander Archdale and Margaret Rhondda founded the Open Door Council with Chrystal Macmillan and Elizabeth Abbott in order to focus on economic emancipation for women?Source: Ewan, Elizabeth L. (2006). The Biographical Dictionary of Scottish Women. Edinburgh University Press. p. 16. ISBN 9780748617135.

Created by PrometheasOre (talk). Nominated by Stinglehammer (talk) at 15:53, 13 March 2017 (UTC).

New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced. However, there is extensive word-by-word and sentence-by-sentence close paraphrasing which must be rewritten in your own words:
Source: During the First World War she started a training farm for women agricultural workers, served as a clerical worker with Queen Mary's Army Auxiliary Corps from 1917, and in 1918 worked in the women's department of the Ministry of National Service.
Article: During the First World War she started a training farm for women agricultural workers, served as a clerical worker with Queen Mary's Army Auxiliary Corps from 1917, and in 1918 worked in the women's department of the Ministry of National Service.
Source: The six original specific aims were: (1) Satisfactory legislation on child assault; (2) Satisfactory legislation for the widowed mother; (3) Satisfactory legislation for the unmarried mother and her child; (4) Equal rights of guardianship for married parents; (5) Equal pay for teachers; (6) Equal opportunities for men and women in the civil service.
Article: The group's specific aims were:

Satisfactory legislation on child assault
Satisfactory legislation for the widowed mother
Satisfactory legislation for the unmarried mother and her child
Equal rights of guardianship for married parents
Equal pay for teachers
Equal opportunities for men and women in the civil service (Each line need to be :#paraphrased or put in quotes)

Source: Later that month Helen Archdale was arrested with Adela Pankhurst and Maud Joachim in Dundee after interrupting a meeting being held by the local MP, Winston Churchill. On 20th October all three women went on hunger strike. They were all released after four days of imprisonment.
Article: Later that month she was arrested with Hannah Mitchell (she's not mentioned in the source), Adela Pankhurst and Maud Joachim in Dundee and convicted of a breach of the peace after interrupting a meeting being held by the local MP, Winston Churchill. Following this on 20 October all three women went on hunger strike. All three were released after four days of imprisonment.
According to the Oxford Dictionary of National Biography source, her maiden name was Helen Russel. Why is the page named Helen Alexander Archdale, and not Helen Russel Archdale or just Helen Archdale? I also added a clarification tag to "equalitarian feminism" — what is this? Is it a typo? Does it have an associated Wikipedia page?
Regarding the hooks, the first one is OK; it would be better not to identify Winston Churchill as an MP in Dundee for intrigue. But an even better hook would be her daughter remembering that she supplied her mother with rocks for her window-breaking protest.
No QPQ needed for first-time nominator. Image in article is fair use. Yoninah (talk) 22:29, 19 March 2017 (UTC)

Despite two separate pings to the nominator's talk page, there has been no attempt to address the issues raised here, except for the article creator modifying the first bit of copying mentioned above (in the article's intro). Marking nomination for closure, though if action is taken to address the rest of the issues before this closes and is noted here, the nomination can continue. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:46, 8 April 2017 (UTC)