Template:Did you know nominations/Gene Stratton-Porter Cabin (Rome City, Indiana)

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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 20:24, 25 July 2013 (UTC)

Gene Stratton-Porter Cabin (Rome City, Indiana)

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... ~~that the grounds of the Gene Stratton-Porter Cabin (pictured), in Rome City, Indiana, is the burial place of author Gene Stratton-Porter and her daughter?~~

Reviewed: Take Back the Night

Created by SL93 (talk). Self nominated at 22:24, 21 July 2013 (UTC).

Good to go! Article length of 2000+ characters good. Hook length good, accurate and verified. Age of article (1 day) is good. Article is free of close paraphrasing issues, copyright violations and plagiarism. Picture is copyright free. QPQ done.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:25, 22 July 2013 (UTC)

The wording of the hook is awkward: "the grounds ... is the burial place". I'd suggest some rewording, perhaps reversed to say that the author and her daughter are buried on the grounds etc., or just change the start to say "that included on the grounds" etc. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 02:43, 23 July 2013 (UTC)

I don't understand how it sounds awkward and I'm not sure how I can reword it without knowing what you consider awkward about it. SL93 (talk) 02:46, 23 July 2013 (UTC)

To me, it sounds awkward to use a singular verb with "the grounds". To me, "that included on the grounds is the burial place" sounds much better than "that the grounds is the burial place". Maybe it's just me. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 02:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)

... that included on the grounds of the Gene Stratton-Porter Cabin (pictured), in Rome City, Indiana, is the burial place of author Gene Stratton-Porter and her daughter? SL93 (talk) 03:01, 23 July 2013 (UTC)

Reiterating Doug Coldwell's tick. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 05:44, 23 July 2013 (UTC)