Template:Did you know nominations/Fumiteru Nakano

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 22:42, 13 June 2013 (UTC)

Fumiteru Nakano

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... that Japanese tennis player Fumiteru Nakano reached the fourth round of the men's singles at the 1937 French Championships, a result that wasn't repeated by any Japanese until Kei Nishikori's 2013 feat?

ALT1:... that Japanese tennis player Fumiteru Nakano reached the fourth round of the men's singles at the 1938 French Championships, a result that was not achieved again by a Japanese man until 2013?"
Reviewed: Joseph Henry Memorial

Created by Wolbo (talk). Nominated by Lajbi (talk) at 17:54, 7 June 2013 (UTC).

Date, length, reference and QPQ checks. Regarding the hook, I think "by any Japanese" could be much better worded. Obviously being the men's single's this feat is only open to men, so how about rewording to "a result that was not (MOS:N'T) achieved again by a Japanese man until 2013?" Mentioning Kei Nishikori name in the hook is all well and good, but a) it makes the hook longer than it needs to be and b) it distracts from the hooks subject, being Fumiteru Nakano. Just something to take into consideration. Also I think the article would be better if instead of placing the note b) in the article you just expanded the actual prose. I.e: "Nakano reached the fourth round of the men's singles at the 1937 French Championships, a feat that would not be achieved again by a Japanese man until 2013". Freikorp (talk) 07:23, 10 June 2013 (UTC)

Added ALT1 based on your advise. Lajbi ^{Holla @ me • CP} 11:57, 10 June 2013 (UTC)

ALT1

Good to go. Freikorp (talk) 12:04, 10 June 2013 (UTC)

The hook is incorrect. It is not 1937 that Nakano reached the fourth round. It is 1938. See 1937 French Championships – Men's Singles and 1938 French Championships – Men's Singles#Section 7. --Kusunose 06:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

You're absolutely right. I'v corrected it. Lajbi ^{Holla @ me • CP} 08:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)