Template:Did you know nominations/Ernye Ákos

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 00:35, 11 November 2013 (UTC)

Ernye Ákos

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... that Ernye Ákos saved the life of Hungarian king Béla IV by handing over his horse after the disastrous Battle of Mohi in 1241?

Reviewed: Kosta Manojlović

Created by Norden1990 (talk) 23:40, 3 November 2013 (UTC).

Length, date ok, hook accepted AGF, good to go. --Soman (talk) 03:31, 4 November 2013 (UTC)

This hook, and the article text it's taken from, is insufficiently clear. "Passing his horse" could easily mean riding his own horse so fast he passed the king's horse. It sounds, rather, that the two men switched horses so the king could have the fresher animal. There are problems with the prose; for example, in that first "Career" paragraph, from "passing his full strength horse" (perhaps "exchanging his full-strength horse with the king's tiring mount"?) to the odd use of "refugeed" to "he could manage to survive", and I think you mean "into exile" rather than "in exile". It would help if the article received a copyedit. BlueMoonset (talk) 08:30, 4 November 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your remarks. I hope "handing over" is an appropriate phrase in this sentence. --Norden1990 (talk) 15:52, 4 November 2013 (UTC)

That seems like a reasonable reword. I also did a copyedit of the article and everything appears to be in order. Restoring approval. Thingg^⊕^⊗ 22:46, 8 November 2013 (UTC)