Template:Did you know nominations/Edgar Jaffé

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The result was: promoted by Cielquiparle (talk) 04:22, 30 August 2023 (UTC)

Edgar Jaffé

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Edgar Jaffé in 1902

~~... that Edgar Jaffé's (pictured) wife, Else von Richthofen, had affairs with both Max and Alfred Weber?~~ Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/808805
- ALT1: ... that Edgar Jaffé (pictured), a former supporter of the German Empire, participated in the founding of the People's State of Bavaria? Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/808805
- ALT2: ... that Edgar Jaffé (pictured) coedited the Archiv für Sozialwissenschaft und Sozialpolitik with Max Weber and Werner Sombart? Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/808805
- ALT3: ... that Edgar Jaffé (pictured) was a descendent of the prominent Jaffe family? Source: https://www.degruyter.com/document/doi/10.1515/9783111548579.225/html
- ALT4: ... that when Edgar Jaffé (pictured) died, D. H. Lawrence wrote to his widow and said that he was glad that Jaffé had died? Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/808805
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Created by Susmuffin (talk). Self-nominated at 23:15, 29 July 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Edgar Jaffé; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

Article meets DYK requirements and a QPQ has been provided. I didn't find any close paraphrasing. Unfortunately, none of the hooks proposed are suitable at the moment. For one thing, except for ALT2, all of them are lacking footnotes at the relevant sentences. Secondly, as much as I like history and know who Max Weber is, none of the hooks seem to be hooky or important unless you have a knowledge of history or the social sciences. I'm also not a fan of ALT0 not just because it seems specialist but also because it seems to focus more on his wife than the subject. If there's any hook here with potential, it's probably ALT4, but the current version is a bit hard to read and the point of the hook, while I understand it, might not be easy to get by other readers. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 12:21, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

I moved a number of citations up to the relevant sentences. The fourth hook was also altered. ―Susmuffin ^Talk 21:14, 5 August 2023 (UTC)

I suppose the new wording is better. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:30, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

I could also get rid of the "who had married his widow's sister" part of the sentence and change "her" to "his widow". ―Susmuffin ^Talk 03:23, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

The current wording is also rather clunky so anything to make it more readable would be good. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 23:51, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

I made the suggested changes. ―Susmuffin ^Talk 04:56, 15 August 2023 (UTC)

I like the idea of ALT4 but it might be too confusing for some readers, too many repetitions of "he" making it a bit hard to follow. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 14:33, 17 August 2023 (UTC)

I was beginning to wonder if that would be an issue. In any case, it has been resolved. ―Susmuffin ^Talk 07:38, 18 August 2023 (UTC)

That should do it. Only ALT4 is approved; I don't have access to the source so AGF. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:08, 22 August 2023 (UTC)