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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:20, 1 February 2018 (UTC)

Donna Kennedy

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Created by Drchriswilliams (talk). Self-nominated at 15:21, 9 January 2018 (UTC).

  • I've made a few amendments to the articles (none of the club years are cited, only examples of match reports during the years in question), but there are still a few issues – the bit about her 69th cap is cited to an article that says she will play, not that she did; the same is true of the citation for her 82nd cap. Also, the bit about her returning to number 8 doesn't state that she returned to that position, only to the forwards. The hook is fine though. Cheers, Number 57 21:54, 9 January 2018 (UTC)
Drchriswilliams, Number 57 - I've addressed these issues and updated the article to clean it up and include some additional notable points. The Rambling Man - would you mind taking a look and provide some additional feedback?
* ALT 1: ... that Donna Kennedy was the world’s most-capped women's rugby player from 2004-2016 and as of November 2017 remains the most-capped player of any gender in Scotland with 115 caps?
* ALT 2: ... that Donna Kennedy is the most-capped international rugby player—woman or man—in Scotland with 115 caps and was the world’s most-capped women's player from 2004-2016? Hmlarson (talk) 20:47, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
Sure, I'll take a look. Right now, my instinct is that every one of these hooks is a little too contrived. I'll get back to you shortly. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:59, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
Ok, my opener: firstly "Kennedy played in 2010 Women's Rugby World Cup and scored a try against Sweden." implies she should have some points in her infobox. (oh, and "largest number" -> "most"!!) Secondly, let's stick to her being the all-time top Scottish appearance holder, the "between these years" kind of hooks are meh, and overly wordy. Something like "... that the rugby union player Donna Kennedy holds the record for international appearances for Scotland women's national rugby union team?" Just a suggestion (a simple one, granted). The Rambling Man (talk) 21:05, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
The Rambling Man Just want to make sure you noticed the distinction between top Scottish appearance holder and WORLD between the years of 2004-16 per ALT 2. She held the world record between those years - this is not a minor point to just ignore. If anyone has specific re-wording suggestions, please add them. Hmlarson (talk) 21:11, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
Yep, got that, but the point I made was that the wording around it is so clunky it's not DYK. You could alternatively say that she appeared in more rugby union matches than any other international player in 2004. Just don't try to conflate too many factoids in one hook. Hookiness is important, as is accuracy. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:15, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
Ok, how's this:
  • ALT 3: ... that Donna Kennedy became the first Scottish international rugby player—woman or man—to reach 100 caps? Hmlarson (talk) 21:20, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
  • The Rambling Man - I'm unable to find her point totals, unfortunately. I have made some additional revisions to the article for readability and suggested an ALT 3 above. Thanks for taking the time to take a look + provide input. Hmlarson (talk) 22:24, 13 January 2018 (UTC)
I think Hmlarson's ALT3 is concise but doesn't provide the perspective of her international achievements. Unfortunately I can't see a published source that documents women cap-holders during the full period 2004-2016. And I appreciate The Rambling Man's input about not having a hook that is too contrived. Saying that, how about:
  • ALT 4: ... that Donna Kennedy became the world's most-capped women's rugby player in 2004 and last held this honour in 2016 by which point she was also the most-capped player of any gender in Scotland with 115 caps? Drchriswilliams (talk) 09:07, 14 January 2018 (UTC)
  • Drchriswilliams TRM can correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe he clarified that by contrived, he meant trying to force "too many factoids in one hook" and the wording was too clunky. Can you try to edit this a little? Hmlarson (talk) 19:42, 14 January 2018 (UTC)
  • In addition, ALT4 is over the absolute maximum of 200 characters allowed for DYK hooks, so I've had to strike it. Here's a variant that shortens ALT4 but adds her retirement (I hope it's less clunky and not over factoided at 181 characters, though there may still be too much to it):
I would, however, like to point out that "caps" means nothing to most people as it seems to be UK-specific; there isn't even a wikilink for it (Cap (sport) seems a likely match) explaining the concept in Donna's article, and there certainly should be. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:56, 15 January 2018 (UTC)
I've added a link to cap in the lead and to ALT 3, BlueMoonset. I prefer ALT3 or ALT 5. Hmlarson (talk) 06:27, 16 January 2018 (UTC)
I think ALT5 is great because it captures several elements of her career without appearing contrived, ALT3 is also good by virtue of being succinct. I have struck a few hooks that weren't as good. Drchriswilliams (talk) 17:59, 20 January 2018 (UTC)

Length and age at time of nomination ok, no copyviolations or plagiarism concerns, reliable sources used. 3 editors in support of ALT5. Hmlarson (talk) 23:06, 30 January 2018 (UTC)