Template:Did you know nominations/Daroji Eramma

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The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by BlueMoonset (talk) 15:32, 22 May 2018 (UTC)

Daroji Eramma

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... that Daroji Eramma, a performer of Burra katha, received the Karnataka Rajyotsava Award? 1
- ALT1:... that ...? Source: "You are strongly encouraged to quote the source text supporting each hook" (and [link] the source, or cite it briefly without using citation templates)

Created by Prm 1302 (talk) and Kannaki.deka (talk). Nominated by Titodutta (talk) at 21:19, 28 March 2018 (UTC).

Review: Template:Did you know nominations/Irish Landmark Trust
Note: Nominator's credit not needed, I have removed my name from credits below.

. The article is new and created by new editors. There article is few characters short of standard 1500 which can be fulfilled by converting Award section in prose. The article is underlinked. It also needs some reorganising, grammar corrections, removal of minor puffery. QPQ pending. Hook is OK but a hook about her memory (12 epics/7000 pages) can be more interesting.-Nizil (talk) 11:59, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Thank you, will check --Titodutta (talk) 12:41, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

@Prm 1302, Kannaki.deka, and Titodutta:, its been a week almost. No edits or updates yet. Just a reminder.-Nizil (talk) 20:28, 7 April 2018 (UTC)

Working --Titodutta (talk) 15:56, 8 April 2018 (UTC)
User:Nizil Shah, made some changes, IMHO, if we convert the award section to prose, there will be too many repetitions "she won this award" and "she won that award." I have added QPQ. --Titodutta (talk) 09:34, 11 April 2018 (UTC)

@Titodutta:, thank you for completing the copyediting. I think currently awards are present in all three sections with repetitions . They can be brought together in one section. The prose would make it represent better by referring who presented the award and when. Studies on her should not be under career section. Her lead section does not summarize the main text but includes some additional info. So please make a section titled Life followed by Recognition (which can also include studies on her). I also propose that the hook should point to some better info like her memory instead of an award because that will make more people to read about her. I have also found some additional information in references which can be included in the article. Regards,-Nizil (talk) 10:50, 11 April 2018 (UTC)

I have done some copyediting and some reorganisation. How does it look now? can you propose alternative hook?-Nizil (talk) 11:29, 11 April 2018 (UTC)

@Titodutta, Prm 1302, and Kannaki.deka:. Please look at the article and propose alternative hook.-Nizil (talk) 05:59, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

I do not have an alternative hook, please consider this DYK request as "withdrawn" --Titodutta (talk) 05:42, 22 May 2018 (UTC)