Template:Did you know nominations/Charles Mackarness
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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 12:29, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
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Charles Mackarness
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- ... that during the German bombardment of Scarborough in December 1914, Rev Charles Mackarness (who won the FA Cup in 1874) continued the Holy Communion service at St Martin's Church (pictured), despite the noise and damage to the church?
- Comment: If I had realised the significance, I would have had this article ready for the 100th anniversary of the raid.
Created by Bikeroo (talk). Self nominated at 16:23, 13 January 2015 (UTC).
. New article, long enough within policy. Good hook. FunkyCanute (talk) 18:33, 13 January 2015 (UTC)
The hook is too long. Excluding (pictured), which doesn't count, it's 223 characters. The limit is 200. The hook will have to be trimmed or replaced with a shorter one. Also the review doesn't specify what was done, such as a paraphrasing check. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 21:15, 13 January 2015 (UTC)
- Agreed, hook is too long. With regards to 'what was done', that should be covered by my comment: New article, long enough within policy. Admittedly, there is a comma missing after enough, which perhaps doesn't make clear that the article is new enough, long enough and adheres to policy.FunkyCanute (talk) 21:35, 13 January 2015 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that during the German bombardment of Scarborough in December 1914, Rev Charles Mackarness (who won the FA Cup in 1874) continued the Holy Communion service at St Martin's Church (pictured), despite the noise?
- ALT2: ... that during the German bombardment of Scarborough in December 1914, Rev Charles Mackarness continued the Holy Communion service at St Martin's Church (pictured), despite the noise and damage to the church?
- — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bikeroo (talk • contribs) 22:56, 13 January 2015 (UTC)
- ALT2 looks good to me. — Preceding unsigned comment added by FunkyCanute (talk • contribs) 19:03, 14 January 2015 (UTC)