Template:Did you know nominations/Broadmoor Sirens

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 13:55, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

Broadmoor Sirens

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~~... that the Broadmoor Sirens (pictured) are activated every Monday at 10 am in preparation to warn residents of escaped patients from Broadmoor?~~

Reviewed: Portrait of an African Man

Moved to mainspace by The C of E (talk). Self nominated at 11:16, 5 February 2015 (UTC).

Interesting and rather creepy article. It's well-written and just about long enough. Sourcing is fine, with plenty of citations and appropriate sources; the hook is interesting and is also sourced. QPQ has been done. Prioryman (talk) 22:47, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

The hook as phrased makes it sound like the activate the sirens as a prelude to intentionally allowing a patient to escape, which I somehow doubt is the protocol actually in use.

ALT1 ... that the Broadmoor Sirens (pictured)‍—‌tested every Monday at 10 am‍—‌are used to warn residents that a patient has escaped from Broadmoor? EEng (talk) 05:46, 8 February 2015 (UTC)

I'm fine with that proposed hook. Prioryman (talk) 19:39, 8 February 2015 (UTC)

Another tweak:
ALT2: ... that the Broadmoor Sirens (pictured), used to warn local residents that a patient has escaped from Broadmoor, are tested every Monday at 10 am? Yoninah (talk) 01:12, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

Both ALTs are clearly superior to the original hook, which is awkward at best. I've struck the original. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 02:25, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

@Prioryman:, can you review these alts please? The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 08:53, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

The problem with ALT2 is it gives emphasis to the testing over the possibility Hannibal Lecter abroad on the desolate, windswept moors.

ALT3 ... that the Broadmoor Sirens (pictured) are tested every Monday at 10 am to ensure their readiness to give warning should a patient escape from Broadmoor?

EEng (talk) 13:03, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

I think ALT3 is probably the best one here. Prioryman (talk) 21:58, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

"... abroad on the desolate, windswept moors"?! I'll have you know Crowthorne looks very nice at this time of year. That nice Mrs. Lecter often helps out down at the RSPB charity shop, as does the local verger.Martinevans123 (talk) 11:37, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

Could be worse -- Hannibal Lecter could be a broad on the windswept moors. EEng (talk) 16:51, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

This appears to have got sidetracked. Can we get a new review in please? The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 10:05, 23 February 2015 (UTC)

As stated previously by Prioryman, this article qualifies for DYK on the grounds of newness and length. The image is properly licensed and the article is neutral, and I found no evidence of copyright/close paraphrasing violations. ALT3 seems to be acceptable to everyone. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:41, 23 February 2015 (UTC)

Are you withholding the tick just to tease us? EEng (talk) 19:46, 23 February 2015 (UTC)

Belatedly adding a tick. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:16, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Now, now, EEng, don't tick him off... Prioryman (talk) 15:10, 5 March 2015 (UTC)