Template:Did you know nominations/2014 National Security Agency illegal seizure

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:30, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

2014 National Security Agency illegal seizure

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... that operatives of the National Security Agency in 2014 burst in on South Korean businessmen in a hotel room in Monrovia, Liberia and illegally seized US$247,500?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Minori Suzuki (2nd nomination)

Created by Muzzleflash (talk). Self-nominated at 15:34, 21 October 2017 (UTC).

Interesting facts, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Suggestions:

Create the red links.
Maybe add a picture.

Hook: A bit long but fine.Zigzig20s (talk) 02:07, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

I have reduced the length of the hook a little bit. For me it's tough to find images. Maybe the most obvious image is a logo of the NSA. But even the NSA official website does not carry a simple logo. There is a logo but with the national flag stylistically stuck in the background. I don't think there is a free image of the director of the agency. I can stick an image of President Sirleaf in the article as she is part of the story but if she is the only image then seems to be undue prominence... Muzzleflash (talk) 03:56, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Also:

The article has the requisite 1500-character lengtth.

All paragraphs have at least one cite.

It is written neutrally ("burst in" is a little iffy).

You have performed an adequate QPQ, so it is ready to go.

Thanks!Zigzig20s (talk) 13:04, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi, Zigzig20s asked me to look over his/her first review. The review is fine, and the article is very well written. But IMO the main point of the article, that this event caused a political scandal in Liberia, would make it hookier. What do you think about:

ALT1: ... that a political scandal erupted after operatives of the Liberian National Security Agency illegally seized US$247,500 from a group of South Korean businessmen in a hotel room in the capital? Yoninah (talk) 17:41, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing zizzig20s. Thank you Yoninah for the thorough copy editing. When I wrote the hook I wanted to focus on the action as the event itself was so absurd--a spy agency robbing visiting businessmen. However, I defer to your expertise on this and choose hook Alt 1. Muzzleflash (talk) 21:38, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks. We can leave it to the prep promoter to decide. Restoring tick per Zigzig20s' review. Yoninah (talk) 22:00, 26 October 2017 (UTC)