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Reviewer: Jarry1250 (talk · contribs) 22:40, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
Review in progress. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 22:40, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Article would benefit from a copyedit; perhaps the nominator could find someone from the WP:GOCE to perform such an edit. Article also fails the Manual of Style on account of the lead section being too short, though both these points are easily rectifiable.
- Lead improved, I see.
- I have given it a bit of a copyedit myself (I found some dreadful language that I am embarrassed to have written) and requested at the GOCE for someone else to also do so. I will definitely go over it again but I'm pretty busy until late next week so it will be a few days before I get the chance. James086Talk 14:15, 22 February 2013 (UTC)
- Lead improved, I see.
- Article would benefit from a copyedit; perhaps the nominator could find someone from the WP:GOCE to perform such an edit. Article also fails the Manual of Style on account of the lead section being too short, though both these points are easily rectifiable.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- Article appears to be well-sourced to reliable sources, though I am yet to perform the requisite series of spot-checks.
- Spot-checks now done; mostly fine but could someone point out to me where in cites #7 or #16 "the shallow key-press of the metal keyboard" is referred to?
- Anandtech is to cite Asus running out of time, I removed Trusted Reviews and instead put the engadget review of the UX31A that says "That machine was one of our favorites in what was still a budding category, though we took issue with the shallow keyboard and uncomfortable touchpad." diff. I must have linked to the wrong citation. James086Talk 14:15, 22 February 2013 (UTC)
- Spot-checks now done; mostly fine but could someone point out to me where in cites #7 or #16 "the shallow key-press of the metal keyboard" is referred to?
- Article appears to be well-sourced to reliable sources, though I am yet to perform the requisite series of spot-checks.
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- The article covers all the major points with little superfluous material, albeit in a rather unexciting fashion; it would be good to draw out more of the common themes and hence pass over the actual chronology of models faster.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- The article includes both positives and negatives of the models described; and I have no great complaints with its tone throughout.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Under the utilitarian object doctrine, all images are not derivatives of the original designs, and, as such, are okay. The number of images is adequate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Under review. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 22:40, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
- Now on hold, pending copyedit. However, I would be prepared to pass it if no copyedit is forthcoming. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 00:53, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for the comprehensive review. I'll give it another copyedit, most likely next Wednesday or Thursday when I'll have time. James086Talk 14:15, 22 February 2013 (UTC)
Passed as a good article following my copyedit. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 21:54, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks, I'll take another look over for any other prose improvements I can spot. James086Talk 14:26, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for the comprehensive review. I'll give it another copyedit, most likely next Wednesday or Thursday when I'll have time. James086Talk 14:15, 22 February 2013 (UTC)
- Now on hold, pending copyedit. However, I would be prepared to pass it if no copyedit is forthcoming. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 00:53, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
- Under review. - Jarry1250 [Vacation needed] 22:40, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: