Talk:Yugoslav monitor Drava/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 17:26, 5 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this late tonight. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 17:26, 5 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay - I'll get to this right away.

Is it well-written?

1. "The Yugoslav monitor Drava was the name ship of the Enns-class river monitors built for the Austro-Hungarian Navy, and was completed in late 1914" - This wording sounds weird to me. How about "The Yugoslav monitor Drava was the name ship of the Enns-class river monitors built for the Austro-Hungarian Navy in 1914"?

You're right, it is a bit strangely constructed. I've dropped the year, as the ship was actually built between 1912 and 1914. It's not really necessary in the lead.

2. "and fought the Serbian and Romanian armies" - This is just a suggestions, but how about adding "against" between "fought" and "the"?

Done.

3. "Generalfeldmarschall (field marshal) August von Mackensen" - I suggesting changing "(field marshal)" to "(general field marshal)" as that translation is more used.

It is meant as an equivalent rather than a translation, I'll add a note

4. Lastly, I suggest changing "Footnotes" to "References", "References" to "Sources", "Books" to "Printed", and "Websites" to "Online". Just a suggestion. :)

That's the pattern I use for referencing all my articles, and it's in accordance with the MOS.

Is it verifiable with no original research?
Is it broad in its coverage?
Is it neutral?
Is it stable?
Is it illustrated?

The article is excellently written and meets the GA-criteria. Because the four points I left in the "Well-written" section and minor suggestions, I'm going to pass the article. :) Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 15:47, 7 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the suggestions, and for the prompt review. Regards, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 21:50, 7 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]