Talk:Yellow Flicker Beat/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 23:28, 14 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 23:28, 14 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

Please provide ALT text for the infobox image.
I would move the part about the song being from the Mockingjay album from the second sentence to the first sentence of the lead’s first paragraph.
For this part (Yellow Flicker Beat" was described as an), either clarify who is describing the song this way (i.e. critics, fans, Lorde, the song’s writers and producers) or just say (It is an art art pop…).
For this part (Its style was compared to that), again clarify who is doing the action. Who is comparing the song to Lorde’s earlier work here?
I do not think you need the comma after “Team”.
For this part (the makeover of the song), I think that the word “remix” would be more appropriate than “makeover”.
For this part (Lorde performed the song at the), clarify which version of the song she performed as it follows the introduction of the remix so it is a little confusing.

Composition and release

The “Media data and Non-free use rationale” box for the audio sample needs to be completed.
Consequence of Sound should be in italics.
You do not need to include the release year again for the second time you mention Pure Heroine.
For the first sentence of the third paragraph, I would mention that Lorde worked as the curator for the album, and did more than just record songs for it.

Reception

I am a little confused by the first paragraph, specifically the placement of the Schulz’s negative review in the middle of positive reviews.
I am not sure of the relevance of this section (pointed out that its purpose was to promote the Mockingjay soundtrack, not a Lorde studio album).
The first paragraph seems rather disorganized and does not read well. I would try to reorganize this to make the information flow more naturally from one idea to the next.
Great work with the second paragraph.

Music video

Please add ALT text for the image.
For this part (The frequent white colored fashion choices were compared to Peeta's look), clarify who is doing the comparing.
I would include Reference 42 in the image caption.

Live performances

Please add ALT text for the image.
Please add the year in which the image was taken to the image caption.
For this part (The overall performance was praised.), were there any specific aspects of the performance praised?
I would make the AMA performance in its own paragraph.
For this part (performance an A), add a comma after “A”.

Kanye West rework

Link MTV News

Track listing

Change the title to “Track listings” as you list more than one.

Credits and personnel

I believe that all music articles require this type of section.

Final thoughts

Wonderful work on this. Once all of my comments are addressed, I will pass this as a GA. This is my favorite Lorde song and it was cool to learn more about it. Aoba47 (talk) 00:57, 15 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed the article using your suggestions. Thank you so much for picking this up for review. One of my favorite Lorde songs as well. De88 (talk) 05:59, 15 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 14:12, 15 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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